The TRshady Forum became read-only in December 2014. The 10 year history will live on, in this archive.
Continue the discussion with the new home for the Eminem and Hip Hop discussion: HipHopShelter.com.

a lil keystyle i did, nothing special

Want to share a poem, story or a moving article? Share creative literature text here.

a lil keystyle i did, nothing special

Postby stevethetruth » Aug 8th, '07, 16:03

away like crazy, fuck all babies,
you'll never be like me my life's so hazy,
i'm on the new track with my seat back,
oh, and fuck new rap, shit's wack,
south shit blows,
like jenna while digging into that second hole,
but if you must know my stlye will never grow old,
if it emits to dust it must be gold,
oh shit time to stop life's on hold gotta blow
a load on a bitch fore' she gets cold
http://www.myspace.com/stevethetruth <-- my myspace add me!!
User avatar
stevethetruth
Under The Influence
Under The Influence
 
Posts: 4112
Joined: May 27th, '06, 02:06
Location: wherever, whenever
Gender: Male

Re: a lil keystyle i did, nothing special

Postby C-Game » Aug 8th, '07, 16:26

fuck all babies,

no pedo?

lol

looks sweet man....

flows really nice
User avatar
C-Game
Band Leader
Band Leader
 
Posts: 7930
Joined: Jul 24th, '06, 19:02
Location: THRONE of the KING OF KINGS
Gender: Male

Re: a lil keystyle i did, nothing special

Postby 4D » Aug 8th, '07, 22:34

Good flow, and I like tha offbeat pattern and structure. But, fuck babies? Need to watch your words sometimes man, also it's very amateur to be using babies with hazy, you should try to improve your vocabulary. Although you did say it was a keystyle, do you mean just wrote it really quick? Cos it does kinda have that feel. That's cool to do, but don't do it at the expense of good lyrics, there's no point writing something fast if it can't also impress with it's content. Still looking for you to work on your multies and complexity Steve, is it gonna happen, or not interested in that?
Image
.......http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=13&t=34661......
^^Read The Download Section Rules!!^^
User avatar
4D
Under The Influence
Under The Influence
 
Posts: 4864
Joined: May 17th, '05, 10:58
Location: Ireland
Gender: Male

Re: a lil keystyle i did, nothing special

Postby stevethetruth » Aug 9th, '07, 00:26

lol thanks for the feedback and fordie most of it just rolled off my tongue i know i need to up my game multi wise, but idk i just haven't had the time to sit and try, been going through a lot of shit lately

oh and the rhyme hazy and babies wasn't what i was aiming to rhyme i was aiming to rhyme crazy and hazy lol

and i agree i do need to step up my vocab, but once again i don't really get the time to do that :sweating:

and i just wrote it really quick like a minute or two i think
http://www.myspace.com/stevethetruth <-- my myspace add me!!
User avatar
stevethetruth
Under The Influence
Under The Influence
 
Posts: 4112
Joined: May 27th, '06, 02:06
Location: wherever, whenever
Gender: Male


Return to Creative Writing



Who is online

Users browsing this forum: Google [Bot]