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im still here (No song title)

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 10th, '07, 04:36

because of murderous thoughts
no mercy i want
now im thirsty for blood
out every word that i talk
so burdens i've got
they turned me in such
a person who's not
searchin for much
i've been unworthy each month
working non stop
learning im stuck
earning few bucks
doing this stuff
that hurts cuz it's rough
im cursed and it' just
worse that im lost
a dirty ass boss
on my journey i must
reverse and come cross
...i deserve a new cause
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: im still here (No song title)

Postby James R. » Aug 10th, '07, 04:53

That was pretty hot. Had some nice multies in there. Some weren't as solid but for the most part it was right on. I like that you tried to stick with one rhyme through the entire song. You did a nice job with it.
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Re: im still here (No song title)

Postby baller4life » Aug 10th, '07, 05:03

Pretty good. :y:
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