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"Who is the Truth?"

Postby Aft3rmath » Aug 13th, '07, 04:15

(chorus)x2

i strike like a thunder bolt my magic's lighting/
i write like no other and i still keep on fighting/
waves of audio delight to you it's frightning/
i arrive on stage with rage it's exciting/

i'm not here to rival, or beef for the fame/
i'm my own man trying to make it in this game/
i'm struggling, my heart and soul untammed/
the fight inside churns, tryn to break these chains/
feeling the pain, my words get sharper like a blade/
im not gettn paid, I love this game, im gettn made/
if ya listen close you can here the echoes/
my lines, my words, they flow and you know/
this goes to show a true emcee continue to grow/
who wins the wars, awards and makes the doe/

(chorus)x2

i strike like a thunder bolt my magic's lighting/
i write like no other and i still keep on fighting/
waves of audio delight to you it's frightning/
i arrive on stage with rage it's exciting/


My boy truth, you dont mess/
hes got words that will stress and depress/
ya body untill you lay in the ground at rest/
they grow and flow, expand, and manafest/
filling your ears, ya know hes the best/
he tries his hardest, never shows his fear/
he lies like an artists, every line far but near/
so stear clear, he will own you son/
he has won the battle before its begun/

Not fully completed, still working on it......but leave feed please. :worship:
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Re: "Who is the Truth?"

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 13th, '07, 05:14

like the title says, i think u should take more time on it and think about what ur really saying b/c u have the rhymes, u now need something worth talkin bout
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: "Who is the Truth?"

Postby Aft3rmath » Aug 13th, '07, 11:27

um... i don't know what you mean, it does have a topic, its about truth and it never wanders off of that. I think its fine, but me and truth are gonna work on it today and audio it, and try and post it.
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Re: "Who is the Truth?"

Postby stevethetruth » Aug 13th, '07, 16:59

i'ma leech stealing all your speech till i complete
my new reign as a true emcee best believe
that i will flow on and on, yeah..
till i hand the glowing baton, uh huh
i know it's wrong but damn why my speech a pawn
here trembling with fear i feel like i don't belong
and all along i ain't relived feeling deceived
struggling to breathe crumbling, i ain't appeased
i know it's wrong to suddenly stop while on top
maybe i should stop like biggie and pac with a pop
but you know what i'ma hold my head up high
stare at the sky, and just ask why
must i be put to a test look i should a guessed
but man i'm depressed unplanned fulled with stress
endless nights no sleep i fight for what i speak
music is my life and my brains the beat
http://www.myspace.com/stevethetruth <-- my myspace add me!!
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Re: "Who is the Truth?"

Postby Kojack » Aug 13th, '07, 19:41

Steve, is Aft3rmath ur secret lover or sumthin? Why u dickride eachother?
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Re: "Who is the Truth?"

Postby stevethetruth » Aug 13th, '07, 20:00

he's one of my friends we live like 5 minutes away from each other
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Re: "Who is the Truth?"

Postby Kojack » Aug 13th, '07, 20:30

Ahhh amor much amor lmao...
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Re: "Who is the Truth?"

Postby Tash8 » Aug 13th, '07, 20:32

you need to learn when to just shut the fuck up ^
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Re: "Who is the Truth?"

Postby Kojack » Aug 13th, '07, 20:47

Tash8 wrote:you need to learn when to just shut the fuck up ^


Do u?
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Re: "Who is the Truth?"

Postby Aft3rmath » Aug 13th, '07, 22:33

Kid ( Kojack) id watch what you say not all of us are kids who are just talking trash, I'm not someone you want to piss off, and yes that is a threat, and if you got a problem write a song, and show what you got, or else shut up before you go to far. :angry:

Diss:
I know this dude who rhymes with jack/
ko is his name, always talks smack/
low is his game, walks like hes phat/
shows up to rap, turns and runs back/
cant spit on the track, cause the skills he lacks/
shit show, he makes me look good yo/
his words are so low, he on his knees ready to blow/
slops rhymes, like the dick he sucks so much/
he thinks hes good, and that we can get enough/
coccoa the great, more like the forgettable mistake/
in my eyes your fake, just another wanna be great/

I know I suck, And there is no were but up to go for me, as for you, down is were u goin.
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Re: "Who is the Truth?"

Postby Kojack » Aug 14th, '07, 00:15

Yeah im so heartbroken now.
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Re: "Who is the Truth?"

Postby Kojack » Aug 14th, '07, 00:16

OH well, since i aint got nothing better to do and my bro is back in camp go ahead make your threat real im waiting.
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Re: "Who is the Truth?"

Postby James R. » Aug 14th, '07, 06:04

Hahahah @ that threat

It wasn't bad, but it wasn't great. It stayed on the topic of truth. The flow was decent. The rhyming was simplistic. It was decent. The diss was whack as fuck though
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