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Can't Get Money (I Get Money Freestyle)

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Can't Get Money (I Get Money Freestyle)

Postby James R. » Aug 14th, '07, 06:27

Can't get money, can't get money, can't get can't get can't get money (James)
Can't get money, money's never got (I can't get it)
Can't get money, money's never got (I can't get it)
Can't get money, money's never got (Nope)
Money's never got, money's never got (Can't pay my bills!)
Can't get money, money's never got (I can't get it)
Can't get money, money's never got (I can't get it)
Can't get money, money's never got (Naw... Nope)
money's never got, money's nevet got (Can't pay my bills!)

I aint hit it big yet man I’m broke as a bitch
I wake up every morning and hope that I’m rich
50 lookin at Ferraris while I’m lookin at a geo
I don’t talk a lot of shit but I’m cookin up an ego
When people go broke they start stealin the cash
Just blew my savings on a car but can’t fill it wit gas
Can’t keep my money up cuz I heard savin was whack
I’ll have the money when Dre has me blazin a track
Had an old pair of white shoes, I painted them black
They didn’t look new enough so I painted them back
Bleach 2 yr old shirts, people thinking I’m crazy
Can’t get a job now cuz I stink and I’m lazy
I got cousin in the rap game yeah he got a deal
He just lent me forty dollars to pay my water bill
Sears had a job set up made ‘em hold it for a month
Had a clean urine sample but I sold it for a buck

Can't get money, money's never got (I can't get it)
Can't get money, money's never got (I can't get it)
Can't get money, money's never got (Nope)
Money's never got, money's never got (Can't pay my bills!)
Can't get money, money's never got (I can't get it)
Can't get money, money's never got (I can't get it)
Can't get money, money's never got (Naw... Nope)
money's never got, money's nevet got (Can't pay my bills!)
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Re: Can't Get Money (I Get Money Freestyle)

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 14th, '07, 07:18

that shit is funny, i like it :y: :y: 2 thumbs up, way up! lol
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Can't Get Money (I Get Money Freestyle)

Postby Tash8 » Aug 14th, '07, 07:22

flow i thought was a bit off, atleast in text.

hmm

not your best, but the sense of humor in it was good. what woulda made it sicker if you made a good humor wordplay in there..

one thing i thought woulda made it sicker would be saying this

when people go broke they start stealin cash

if you said

when people go broke they start fixin' cash - a nice wordplay plus fixin' means setting up or something ya know?

overall: pretty good, not your best but it's a good new style
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Re: Can't Get Money (I Get Money Freestyle)

Postby James R. » Aug 14th, '07, 07:25

Thanks peeps.
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Re: Can't Get Money (I Get Money Freestyle)

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Aug 14th, '07, 13:27

dude u gotta drop audios... :flower: :flower:
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Re: Can't Get Money (I Get Money Freestyle)

Postby baller4life » Aug 14th, '07, 14:46

If you have the right voice it could be a good diss track. :y:
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Re: Can't Get Money (I Get Money Freestyle)

Postby joelle » Aug 14th, '07, 19:03

you rock Jam :king: (heh get it)
Yes, we can.
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Re: Can't Get Money (I Get Money Freestyle)

Postby IceAxe » Aug 14th, '07, 20:18

The flow was ok. Some of the multis were kinda simple compared to your other stuff, but since it's a freestyle that's fine.

Good work overall :y:
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Re: Can't Get Money (I Get Money Freestyle)

Postby Flamez » Aug 14th, '07, 21:42

haha that was nice man...
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