Disturbance and Pain (Tash and James R. Collabo)

[James R.]

(Hook x2)
My rage is the page and my brain serves as a stage
Confusin solutions goin off disturbance and pain
We get worse as we go, you know you heard me the same
Cock it back blow it off we gonna murder the game

(Verse 1- Tash8)
My passion released is like a manson family feast
Once I find the mic, I spit like a rain shower at ease
Flow like a tongue twister makin' your brain stagger and sieze
Lyrics smokin' sicker than jessica alba's herpes
Anger like rage against the machine on your stereo piece
Decease with no pistols on either of my fury hands
Leave you and your cats more spiced up than curry cans
Come back the next day and cancer-head you like britney spears
My flow becomes faster than hurricane katrina on bently wheels
Turn around, attack, and atrociously assasinate you twenty seals
By now, my anger erupts aiming at assholes with my shiny steel
Lyrics added aggressive alliterations and a master piece feel
And once I find the mic, I explode like a nagasaki fat man piece
My passion released is like a manson family feast

(Hook x2)

(Verse 2- James R.)
My pen is like the switch for a nuclear missile
Leavin acid on the page that’ll chew through ya tissue
Move and I’ll get you talking bout ya diamonds is shinin
I’ll be robbin you blind since you always hidin behind it
The weed when I lace it damn near blow ya mind when you light it
Breathe and you taste you feel like you’re alive but your dying
Rip my heart out and stab it then I place it on the page
Take a ten second lead and then I’ll chase you on the stage
My fridge is a casket basement like a funeral home
Don’t try to plead a case me man I’m screwed in the dome
I rip and chew MC’s like the rap Jeff Domer
Causin health problems like I marked you for stealth bombers
Shootin up your foundation wit rounds 8x11
Bitches love to suck nines so they’ll be tastin my weapon
This is like a commission letter to a psychiatric ward
I might get at ya whore when she sees me bitin at the door

(Hook x2)

[IceAxe]

Oh shit... this is tight. I like the number and quality of the metaphors. Some nice multis from both of ya. Nothin negative to say about it.

keep it up

[Tash8]

Oh shit... this is tight. I like the number and quality of the metaphors. Some nice multis from both of ya. Nothin negative to say about it.

keep it up

Thanks Man

[Flamez]

damn that was some nice shit from both of ya..

[James R.]

Thanks for the feed. Keep it comin.

[Tash8]

Thanks again,

any more criticism? please..?

[Ka0t1c]

James, your verse is well put, nice drop both of u, i look forward to another one of your collab's

[Tash8]

thanks for feed

[stevethetruth]

i got nothing to say here except well written verses from both of ya, hope to see this recorded and not set to waste

[Tash8]

bump

[Tash8]

bump

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was a great read

the consistency in the verses was the best thing

since both verses are nicely done id be nit picking to go through and fualt parts, this is good work and both ya'll know how to keep going so just keep it up

[Tash8]

was a great read

the consistency in the verses was the best thing

since both verses are nicely done id be nit picking to go through and fualt parts, this is good work and both ya'll know how to keep going so just keep it up

thanks man, after rereading this every once in a while, i always find new sick things in james verse.. that i didn't notice the first time.

[Rain Matrix]

nice drop, don't let it go 2 waste like I let mine

close it off seal it forever

[shady4life!]

that was pretty good fellas u two shud be proud of urselves and maybe even hav party
but the only critisim i cud think of and find is that the song sounded more like a poem than a rap.... its actually hard to tell. But i might be wrong but usually in poems, u gotta think hard to find the meanin and its hidden deep, but in most rap songs that i hav heard the meanin is already their and not much extra thot is required. For this song(poem) i think u gotta go dig deep to actually understand fully every thing u say and how it relates to Disturbance and Pain, so it kinda looks more like a poem. But u cant tell how much it will sound like a rap or a poem until u actually spit it and record it. But if u do sometime make sure to post a link or somethin so we can listen to it. Anyway good job u two