a new verse, should be recorded soon

[stevethetruth]

written to a beat made by the one and only mart85, it's called a thousand times

i'ma leech stealing all your speech till i complete
my new reign as a true emcee best believe
that i will flow on and on, yeah..
till i hand the glowing baton, uh huh
i know it's wrong but damn why my speech a pawn
here trembling with fear i feel like i don't belong
and all along i ain't relived feeling deceived
struggling to breathe crumbling, i ain't appeased
i know it's wrong to suddenly stop while on top
maybe i should stop like biggie and pac with a pop
but you know what i'ma hold my head up high
stare at the sky, and just ask why
must i be put to a test look i should a guessed
but man i'm depressed unplanned fulled with stress
endless nights no sleep i fight for what i speak
music is my life and my brains the beat

[Tash8]

ok it's pretty dope, but these are things you should work on

1: multis, multis add so much creativeness and makes flow soo much smoother if they're not forced of course

[James R.]

It seemed to flow pretty well without the beat and thats always a plus. Increased complexity would be a good change. I'm not saying be all mystical and shit, just add a few more metaphors. Really try to make the reader see what you want them to see and feel what you want them to feel. Work on your vocab so you can tap into those emotions. Multies are always nice as well. You did a nice job though man

[stevethetruth]

thanks for the feed guy i'll def try to improve on what both of you said

[IceAxe]

It's pretty well written. The only thing I'd say to work on would to add some metaphors, and add some multis like was said above. The in-rhyme here was nice, and it flowed well too.

Good work, should be a good audio

[Flamez]

well you did a good job on this