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"I know im not the Best"

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"I know im not the Best"

Postby Aft3rmath » Aug 26th, '07, 02:22

I know I need improvement/
advice, when I get it, I use it/
every day my flow makes movements/
tighter they collide, combining the mood with the music/
I know Im fresh outta the white neighborhood/
Im not the best, but I fight for whats tight and whats good/
the point to make, I cross and say as I should/
these lines are sluggish, with no reason or run/
thats why Its rubbish, its for teasn ya tongue/
the reason I rap, is because it passes time/
it helps with the stress that gets the best of my mind/
its the season for new meanins, backstabbin treason with jagged knives/
my vocalz are limpin, taken two steps back at a time/
I wish I was better, not the best, but to be good with my lines/
I sit and try to write my mind to the max of my ability's, I rhyme/
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Re: "I know im not the Best"

Postby Aft3rmath » Aug 26th, '07, 02:46

MY bad peeps I thought i was on Creative writing
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Re: "I know im not the Best"

Postby Kojack » Aug 26th, '07, 14:13

"I know im not the Best"


And i doubt u will ever be :flower: lmao, j/p

You need to work on the flow, each line should 15 syllables (stops for breath count as syllables).
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Re: "I know im not the Best"

Postby Aft3rmath » Aug 26th, '07, 22:47

I dont take advice from posers, please live the real life then come talk to me, because I actually was raised in fuckn Detroit, and half you people don't know what it is really like.
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Re: "I know im not the Best"

Postby Kojack » Aug 26th, '07, 23:10

Aft3rmath wrote:I dont take advice from posers, please live the real life then come talk to me, because I actually was raised in fuckn Detroit, and half you people don't know what it is really like.


I was raised in Crosstown Heights dunny, same thing. I done lost my big brother becuz of that. All you americans have it so hard and "im from D" and "im from Cali". There are hoods outside US u know.

Btw, this aint Kojack, so u know who u talking to.
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