the suicide note

[Flamez]

a young man 25 years of age grabbed a butcher's knife
tried ending his own life but murdered his pregnant wife
before he took his life, with blood he wrote a suicide note
puttin' it inside his own coat and sailed off in a sail boat
wanting to slice his throat and jump off the boat to drown
cold heavy rain started pouring down in his old little town
but all the poor man could do was break down into tears
knowin' his parents haven't been here for so many years
he's been alone living in fear without no back support
he's fallen short he's just abort it was his last resort
stuart was his name he's now dead its on the news report
lookin' distort u remember the suicide note he wrote before
well it reads "dear mom and dad i don't wanna live anymore
without you i'm hittin' the hard floor wanting to open the door
to soar into heaven to be with you once more cuz i'm all alone
don't wanna live like this on my my own i'd rather be in a tombstone
now i'm on my way home to be in your arms with you sharon and jerome"

[sinemm]

that was good!!

and was easy to understand lol keep up like that
ur previous stuff were makin me have to look up dictionary frequently
anyway good job

[Kojack]

He should have used a gun. Blow his noodles out and thats it.

[Tash8]

your rhymes are way too simple

note wrote, life knife, wife... not always bad, but it shows complexity and helps you more if you use slant rhymes.

[Flamez]

finally got feed on something lol..

but thanx for the feed all u i know its a lil simple but oh well finally got feed on something i been waiting for that lol

[Steve Spag]

I liked it, I thought it was pretty damn powerfull. Keep it up.

[Flamez]

thanx for the feed i've regained my confidence cheaa