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at all costs

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 31st, '07, 17:27

i must cross this path at all costs
so i have to adjust, i understand what i've caused
and i plan for the tough traps that will come
plus i'll adapt when along my map that i've drawn
there's a cramp where it's wrong - planted to pause
me from clampin on strong to hault me

i'll gather my thoughts, no one has to help me
it's a matter of want, im gonna travel beyond
in the land we forgot cuz the damage resulting
by the badness which haunt's assaulting our stamina but
don't abandon your hut, stand up, manage your spot
be a man and get guts, not a manequin, stuck
the battles amongst, we'll handle, you'll watch
like a channel, who'll scramble in shock?
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: at all costs

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Sep 1st, '07, 19:13

1st part/pharagraph, is nice, good flow lyrics are nice nothing spectacular but the rhymes were there

2nd part goes of flow with this line "it's a matter of want, im gonna travel beyond
" and doesnt get back onto a strong flow, the ryhmes werent that good either

keep it up :y:
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