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Re: diss verse

Postby -[Zach]- » Sep 10th, '07, 02:41

GOD DAMN!!! u tore that dude a new asshole! congrats :worship:
"Did you ever stop to think/I'm old enough to go to war but I ain't old enough to drink" - 2Pac

"It's time to let the truth be told/There ain't no brighter day/'Cause when it all unfolds/A n**** gon' just pass away/These haters tryna stop my grind/But I bet them hoes can't block my shine/So tired of takin' losses not this time/I can't save the whole world I'm just tryna look out for mine" - Z-Ro

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Re: diss verse

Postby BabyBLue91 » Sep 10th, '07, 03:27

nice job mcmaybe :flower:
looks like u enjoyed christinas company haha
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Re: diss verse

Postby shady4life! » Sep 10th, '07, 21:35

Those rhymes were okay but werent that too good. But for some reason i really like that diss. It actually sounded kinda like a freestlye. People around here to often make poems, and start talkin about other stuff that dont exactly fully make sense, and takes time to fully grab and think its a rap. But this one was nice and easy to get, and every line made perfect sense. Nince :y:
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Re: diss verse

Postby Tash8 » Sep 10th, '07, 21:40

sounded like eminem in some parts... so i would tyr to change up the style, but other than that, it's nice
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