Disturbance and Pain (Tash and James R. Collabo)

[joelle]

^ poetry and rap are very similar imo. Besides, digging a little deep for the underlying message isn't necessarily a bad thing in rap songs..a nice change of pace from the ones that scream the message in your face.

Nice collab.

[James R.]

Thanks Joelle, that's what I would have said more or less.

[joelle]

obviously

[shady4life!]

.....haha smartasses.... do u think i dont know that im just sayin it still sounds a lil bit like a poem instead of a rap okay... when people rap it usually sounds more specific and definite than poems. We were learnin poetry in my enlish class a long time ago, but when we were i realised that many poems hav meanins deep hidden within them, that u hav to study hard and look for. But for rap rappers dont expect a lot of people to be readin and studyin over their lyrics so they make it more literal so it cud be understood easier. If this was meant to be a rap then they shudda done that. But dont get me wrong im not critisizin it or anythin i think it was great, but when i read it it seemed more like i was readin a poem instead. And the disturbance and pain theme did not show up a lot but i still cud be there, so that made it look even more like a poem since what exactly the person meant was deeply hidden and hard to find.

[James R.]

Your mistake is thinking that disturbance and pain was the theme. It wasn't the theme. The theme was talking about how crazy we are lyrically murdering and mutilating people via lyrics. Title doesn't equal theme. And as for the whole direct delivery thing how do you explain a song like Touchdown where Eminem talks about a car but is obviously using it as a metaphor for an undefined thing. That's not specific at all and that's nothing like a poem

[shady4life!]

Your mistake is thinking that disturbance and pain was the theme. It wasn't the theme. The theme was talking about how crazy we are lyrically murdering and mutilating people via lyrics. Title doesn't equal theme. And as for the whole direct delivery thing how do you explain a song like Touchdown where Eminem talks about a car but is obviously using it as a metaphor for an undefined thing. That's not specific at all and that's nothing like a poem

for starter touchdown is a bullshit song... and despite wat he was sayin it actually sounded like a rap more than it did a poem. But i dont wish to argue any longer we all hav our own personall views. Buts its a great poem tho, oops i mean rap .

[James R.]

.....not that this sounds like a poem if you don't read it like a retarded kindergartener. Anyways, it is a great song I know.


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[Willystyle]

That shit is tight, props to both of you especially James R.

[Tash8]

thanks

and pump

[Hadez]

nice verses from both of you

Tash, ur verse was dope. i think the only thing is the jessica alba line didn't flow well, but that might just be me, i dunno. but James killed it on this, propz James. amazing verse.

[Tash8]

nice verses from both of you

Tash, ur verse was dope. i think the only thing is the jessica alba line didn't flow well, but that might just be me, i dunno. but James killed it on this, propz James. amazing verse.

thanks a lot man and yea now that i reread it, some stuff just doesn't fit

like the stereo piece line as well..

[Robbie G]

I liked it man, not much to criticize