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How Much!

Postby SajN » Oct 11th, '07, 20:16

I went trough the same shit my whole life every minute
heard the same shit everyday, I mean it.
I was bullied at school, yelled at home
mom wouldn't let me be alone.
I wish I was gone, before this nightmare was turned into a song.
I wanna express this hell, fly stressed through myself
searching for help.
Cant find it, I guess I'm hidin' it.
I went through my whole soul,
didn't find it, ain't my foul,
I wanna growl
When the beat starts
I eat hearts
And I reach parts
where I explain my inner pain,
getting the most insane rain out my eyes,
it's like my body in a flame.
I guess everything is gonna be the same
I'll never change me for what I became
Common, complain, and blame me for some shit.
Yell my name, I wont quit anyway bitch!



It's a loooong time since I dropped something here, and I would appreciate some feed, cuz It has been a long time since I wrote something. I want to check how I am this far.
I have started feeding others, so don't say that I don't feed.

Some parts of this song is true..
And I would also like if someone corrected my english, if it is any mistakes.. :)
Can someone find a good title for this ?

Please feed, I need it.
Last edited by SajN on Oct 13th, '07, 17:18, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Can't find Title .

Postby Rain Matrix » Oct 12th, '07, 21:35

nice piece, titling this is somewhat puzzling

I myself would go with a "How Much"

yur call tho
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Re: Can't find Title .

Postby SajN » Oct 13th, '07, 17:17

Rain Matrix wrote:nice piece

Tnx :)

I wish I could be told more of what I did well, and what I didn't do so well :)
But tnx anyway.
And yeah. I think I use that name .. better than nothing :)

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More feeds please
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Re: How Much!

Postby sinemm » Oct 13th, '07, 18:40

i liked itt!
deep n pretty cool :y: not routine
plain and nice :y:
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Re: How Much!

Postby SajN » Oct 13th, '07, 18:44

Thank You Sinemm :D
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Re: How Much!

Postby SajN » Oct 14th, '07, 16:20

BUMP

feeds please
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Re: How Much!

Postby Tash8 » Oct 14th, '07, 16:28

i really couldn't find the flow to this umm but it's pretty emotional, it was pretty simple, but i had a purpose and was done.. so not bad
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Re: How Much!

Postby SajN » Oct 15th, '07, 07:40

Tash8 wrote:i really couldn't find the flow to this umm but it's pretty emotional, it was pretty simple, but i had a purpose and was done.. so not bad

ok. its cool Tash.
Thats how it help me.
I'll be better when someone tell me that :)
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Re: How Much!

Postby Tash8 » Oct 15th, '07, 20:48

u can't just get better like that

like it's not you can read a book on how to rap, you gotta find your own style and stuff, like you don't always have to use multis, you could find a different thing to do.. the "rules" that say rhyme and flow and shit like that are just the basics, after that you find your own style and ways.
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Re: How Much!

Postby SajN » Oct 16th, '07, 10:35

Tash8 wrote:u can't just get better like that

like it's not you can read a book on how to rap, you gotta find your own style and stuff, like you don't always have to use multis, you could find a different thing to do.. the "rules" that say rhyme and flow and shit like that are just the basics, after that you find your own style and ways.

I know .. I think you misunderstood. When someone tell me "that wasn't good", or like you said it was simple, I try to do better then, not making it simple.. blablah..

Fuck.. It's so hard for me to explain..

Btw, did I have any multies.?
I don't know it myself
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Re: How Much!

Postby C-Game » Oct 16th, '07, 10:59

I went trough the same shit my whole life every minute
heard the same shit everyday, I mean it.
I was bullied at school, yelled at home
mom wouldn't let me be alone.
I wish I was gone, before this nightmare was turned into a song.
I wanna express this hell, fly stressed through myself
searching for help.
Cant find it, I guess I'm hidin' it.
I went through my whole soul,
didn't find it, ain't my foul,
I wanna growl
When the beat starts
I eat hearts
And I reach parts
where I explain my inner pain,
getting the most insane rain out my eyes,
it's like my body in a flame.
I guess everything is gonna be the same
I'll never change me for what I became
Common, complain, and blame me for some shit.
Yell my name, I wont quit anyway bitch!
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Re: How Much!

Postby SajN » Oct 16th, '07, 16:20

Ahh.. I see. Tnx C-G..

I would like some more feeds
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Re: How Much!

Postby SajN » Oct 20th, '07, 19:07

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Re: How Much!

Postby SajN » Nov 1st, '07, 11:53

NoN-Stop wrote:BUMP
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Re: How Much!

Postby Arabian Shady » Nov 1st, '07, 18:15

simple n effective !
but u mite wana make it rhyme more often n concentrate on the flow, so that the person who reads it can enjoy it more
personally i always rite with 1 thing in mind that if a person who knows crap abt rap reads ma post the he/she shud enjoy it
hope u get the idea! :y:
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