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collab with sajjad [REAL IMPORTANT]

Postby Tash8 » Nov 10th, '07, 04:18

a knife what's you grab when the night's despiteful
till you calm down and forget what you might do
to the next guy who steps by, thinkin they're gonna fight you
and now we're back to the start cause life is a cyle
and at the end we've worked hard for notin but a lightful
and we're waiting for the moment to turn off this lightbulb,
so, let's hit the lights cause this shit's painful
all the seconds you worked, tore you to bits n slain you
and now you're all deprived of the shit around you
but the one thing you love is when these bitches crown you

let me get some feedback, cuz this is a REALLY important collab.

this is just saying that life is repetitive and the reason you keep doing it is because you love that "moment"..

let me know if u pick up on that message
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Re: collab with sajjad [REAL IMPORTANT]

Postby Rain Matrix » Nov 10th, '07, 05:30

this was an above average drop

I myself would add vocabulary to tha flow

but by itself now it's still good
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