Perfection?

[JMG]

as far as i come to packin guns
is an artificial water pistol
ull need a star to wish to when i start to diss u
my bar's will split though ur hardest tissue
ur cardalidge too lookin like a shark just bit u
or a car just hit u so u comprehend
once i got my pen im constent then
venom from every direction like a snake swarmin
up allnight cuz im the one that breaks mornin
and cracks dawn but it aint even one yet
and im gonna rap on until (J's) sun sets
let my lungs rest and take 1 breath and proceed
like a blowin cold breeze im flowin so free
and with these scoldin multies i should have a golden trophy
silver oh please dont insult me ,
cuz my games elite and im determinded to raise
when i raise the heat the thermometor cries
im a tickin bomb indiquise bout to blast in action
what do i bring to the table place mats and napkins
cuz im bout to serve u fake asses that think that ur rappin

[Enimee]

that was good it all made sense and the flow wasnt great but then again i was reading off a screen i would add on to this u cud make it nice bro keep at it great work

[Steve Spag]

Pretty nice. The flow was a little choppy, but it was a good drop.

[JMG]

thanks .. yeah i didnt the take time to count the syllabals but im goin to improve it b4 i record it

[city]

pretty hot