Poetry's Finest (UPDATED TOWARDS BOTTOM)

[Steve Spag]

Wrote this acapella a few minutes ago. I think probably my sickest 16 by far, lol.

My life is a play, character's staged//
Ever so neatly, it throws on my rage//
My brain is insane, the game is to gain//
The money, the jewlery, cars and the dames//
In vain I'm in pain, my name remains same//
Call me your Saviour requiring fame//
A lion untammed applyin' the flame//
That burns in my stomach, I'm cryin' for rain//
Messiah for shame, a liar for change//
Throw me a dollar, I'm dyin' today//
I'm hiding my face, in time it'll place//
Itself to the puzzle, am I a disgrace?//
Inside of my space, a time without haste//
It's all imaginary, it's all gone to waste//
A day in my life, the words that I've wrote//
Poetry's finest wrapped up with a bow//

Leave feedback please

[stevethetruth]

got some good lines in there, idk if it's just me but the flow seems a lil off at some points

other than that not bad man

[Requiem]

pretty good, but i agree with steve, the flow's a little off at points. but otherwise good

[Steve Spag]

Thanks much, glad you liked it. Like I said, it was written acapella so you might not get the way it's supposed to sound. The way I do it it sounds right though, lol.

Anybody else got any feed?

[Tash8]

rhymes are way too excessive and simple man...

flow seems fine to me.

[Steve Spag]

I don't think that the rhymes are too simple. Deffinetly different than a lot of my other stuff in my opinion. But thanks, lol.

Anyways, there's some new stuff I just wrote here if anyone could please feed it. The flow is a little weird so you may not get it. Again I wrote it acapella but it sounds good the right way you say it.

I'm feeling tired, I think I need a little boost//
To get me back into my passion, rap attacks around these goofs//
In the booth I am the best, never sweatin', never stress//
Pump the juice inside my chest, I'm a weapon til my death//
Roll the weed into a joint, spark that shit, don't dissapoint//
When that marajuanna's lit, you're attracted to my noise//
Your feet are tappin' to my voice, and it's a trap, nope, not a choice//
My rap is smashin' all your boys while I am actin' so annoyed//
Soo pissed and soo ticked, I missed the whole shit//
I dissed this hoe bitch to make my flow rich//
I'm desensitized to the rap that I hear//
With relentless eyes I will spray the fear//
To all who's near, you'll feel my wrath//
The hall is clear, just accept the facts//
Steve Spag is real, he's a wreck intact//
Just give me a deal, I won't protect the wack//

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[Arabian Shady]

the older 1 was awesome, i got ur point
wiked stuff

the updated 1, i had sum difficulty finding a beat inside ma head, but if u look at da rhymes, pretty kool

nice work man

[Rain Matrix]

decent drop I liked it

[Ka0t1c]

my opinion is that you should focus on something more important and personal instead of just being randomly cocky for no apparent reason other than you know how to rhyme a little bit... I'd like to see something serious from you than something seemingly written from a kid who doesn't get the hip hop point at all.

your basic rap isn't working to your advantage is what I mean.

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

my opinion is that you should focus on something more important and personal instead of just being randomly cocky for no apparent reason other than you know how to rhyme a little bit... I'd like to see something serious from you than something seemingly written from a kid who doesn't get the hip hop point at all.

your basic rap isn't working to your advantage is what I mean.

no offence but if you have read or listened to his other stuff youd see 90% of his tracks are serious personel stuff

[Steve Spag]

my opinion is that you should focus on something more important and personal instead of just being randomly cocky for no apparent reason other than you know how to rhyme a little bit... I'd like to see something serious from you than something seemingly written from a kid who doesn't get the hip hop point at all.

your basic rap isn't working to your advantage is what I mean.

no offence but if you have read or listened to his other stuff youd see 90% of his tracks are serious personel stuff

Yeah, I think I agree with Bar on that one, lol. I'm known for being a rapper that raps about my personal shit. If you listen to any one of my songs you'd be able to tell that. No offence of course or anything, just letting you know, lol.

[SajN]

Great drops Steve
Like both of them.

Like the 1st one better. But the 2nd is close

Keep it up.

[Steve Spag]

Great drops Steve
Like both of them.

Like the 1st one better. But the 2nd is close

Keep it up.

Thanks a lot dude. Glad you like the new shit

I'll try and upload some more shit later on tonight. I wrote a sick new verse the other day and I really gotta upload it, lol.