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NEW SHIT!

Postby Steve Spag » Dec 6th, '07, 05:54

This first one here was just made earlier for fun. Was bored and decided to write some shit without any beat. So again, you may not get the specific flow for it, but if you say it right, it should sounds cool, lol.

My rapid flow attacks the hoes//
I'm rappin' so I'm lackin' woe's//
I'll wrap a bow attached with blow//
Sebastian's nose will clash then close//
My passion knows; the action shows//
The Master roams the tracks alone//
Sit back, get stoned, you're wack, just go//
It's crap, it's slow, you facking foe//

Here's the second peice I just wrote. It's a little Eminemish, but at the same time I bring in my style, which is cool, lol.

My brain is like a highway crash//
3 cars, an Ambulance, a Firetruck smashed and collapsed//
The victim's paralyzed, can't get out of the car//
The fire's burning hard, every arm has been scarred//
Every heart has been harmed, a Family's been torn//
A teenager, a toddler, some adults and some more//
Supposed to feel burned, instead I'm alive//
The hoax has been learned, a duplicate in due time//
I duke it out in my rhymes, a nuke has ruined my mind//
I choose to puke out my lines, a fuse is losin' it's shine//

Leave feedback please :)
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Re: NEW SHIT!

Postby Rain Matrix » Dec 6th, '07, 15:21

I think a combination of tha two drops would have been sick

but they were both sick in their own right

nice drop man
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Re: NEW SHIT!

Postby Arabian Shady » Dec 7th, '07, 13:27

was awesome man! i did find the beat to the first one in ma head,
both of them were sick
as rain says if u coullda merge 'em together then that would be sick as hell
wiked wiked shit steve
peace
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We're all on the same page, Yet we're standing apart on different lines'
So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
"Front Page",Arabian Shady


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Re: NEW SHIT!

Postby SajN » Dec 7th, '07, 15:26

Great man :y:
I got the flow on both.
And both verses were sick!

As the others said: A combination would be sick :y:

Keep it coming!
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Re: NEW SHIT!

Postby Steve Spag » Dec 7th, '07, 21:34

Thanks for the feedback guys, it's greatly appreciated :) I'll try and think of more shit so I can fit the two together.

Anybody else got any feed for me?
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Re: NEW SHIT!

Postby Purple23Haze » Dec 8th, '07, 01:08

Were you influenced by Eminem or what dude?
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Re: NEW SHIT!

Postby BabyBLue91 » Dec 8th, '07, 02:26

i loooooooove tha 2nd verse.. :flower:
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Re: NEW SHIT!

Postby Steve Spag » Dec 8th, '07, 03:04

Purple23Haze wrote:Were you influenced by Eminem or what dude?


Yeah, I've been listening to him for a very long time. You can obviously tell, lol.

BabyBLue91 wrote:i loooooooove tha 2nd verse.. :flower:


Thank you very very much :)

Anyone else got any feedback? :)
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