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**through life!!!**

Postby M-Pyre » Dec 28th, '07, 05:44

I just wrote this, I hope ya like it :D
and owyeah plz give me some feed on this...thnks in advance.

I guard the mic, like I’m part of it/
An archetype, will fight larger kids/
Like star light, I wonder how far it gets/
The hart inside, is starting to get/
Old and tired, no I wont retire/
I’m bold and cold like iron/
It’s like I got towed from road to road in silence/
No one to notice my mode I’m told to hide it/
Show no side, know why to hold your pride in/
Grow entirely on your own home grown mind and/
Throw the so called know it all poster into the fireplace/
And find a way, to find a life as great, you lie awake/
Every night and day, reminded by the nicest things/
You collided with, even if it was just a pile of things/
You relied on it, needed the sight to shine a bit/
Ride with it, side by side and Identify the lies with in/
Sooner or later you’ll find yourself trying to climb a hill/
Cause you fell by the slight push, of this so called friend/
Hold on man, cause they roll on when, they know all ten/
Tones you own, to own the tone you hold on when /
They throw it at you, to go and trap you/
So show m that new, altitude grapple/
And get down to basics, by strangulation/
Man you wasted, my savage rage/
Will contaminate the average hater/
With a fascinating elaboration/
On how to make way,
Whenever I have to make way through a standing ovation/
the greatest is hated
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Re: **through life!!!**

Postby Requiem » Dec 28th, '07, 06:44

there's a lot of flow problems. but there are some pretty ill rhymes there. overall pretty good :y:
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Re: **through life!!!**

Postby Arabian Shady » Dec 29th, '07, 07:55

i actually didnt have ne flow problems, this is one of the sickest shit i've read in a couple of weeks.
pretty good rhymes there man.best part abt it tho-u made it personal n took it level by level, i mean all that wasnt mixed up but u could distinct each rhyme frm the other
wiked wiked drop :y:
peace :b:
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So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
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Re: **through life!!!**

Postby M-Pyre » Dec 29th, '07, 15:16

thnks man, Im just trying to do my thing :8)

and if there is more feed to be extracted from here plz come by and have a word with me :D
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Re: **through life!!!**

Postby city » Jan 5th, '08, 05:43

i dont care what nobody says that ish was dope :y:
Windows tintied on my ride when i drive in it
so when i rob a bank, run and just dive in it
so i'll be disquised in it
and if anybody identifies the guy get it
i'll hide for five minutes
come back, shoot the eye witness
fire at the private eye hired to pry in my bussines
Die b*tches, bastards, brats, pets
this puppy's lucky i aint blast his *ss yet

I'm a CRIMINAL

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Re: **through life!!!**

Postby M-Pyre » Jan 5th, '08, 22:52

ey thnks man!!

keep the feed coming. :y:
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