half mast

[Arabian Shady]

been real long since I dropped
here goes


i've been crossin straight miles,without commiting a crime
just tryin ta put a few smiles,at expense of these rhymes
a silly child with his mind, read this sick flow n you find
it aint leavin for a while , it sticks wid ya for somethime
every words been weighed n debated,hesistated n breakin
weather it shud have stayed or put to rest wid the lamest
is it the way i create it?,is it the way i just shape it?
cause if its eatin ur head up,you can shut fuk up n save it
i've had enough of this hatred,hearing religions being tainted
hearin the faintest n weakest diss could leave me just fainted
so before you think i've just made it,before the best that i've painted
they'll be hauling ma ass of to the morgue to just grave it.
thats why i'm hittin bak at these fags,theyre chokin me wid these gags,
,they can prepare for round two i comin at 'em hard wid these gats,
so ya'll shoud probably lay flat,cause if u dont,i'll probably pay respect at half mast.

I aint angry or anything , i just wanted to write on a topic like that
please leave reviews! i've been contributing as well!!!!!
peace

[SajN]

Really Nice Man
The flow was there.
The lyrics are great and it's nice the way you've written.

[Arabian Shady]

WIKED DUDE
thnx alot for the review
more feeds please!
peace

[Rain Matrix]

I liked tha flow

this drop came together nicely for u

[Arabian Shady]

thnx rain
appreciate that,specially comin frm u
more feeds please
peace

[Hadez]

its nice. got some nice rhymes there. the rhyme scheme isn't as complex as i'd've liked to see, but that's just my personal taste. it turned out nicely. you had the flow on point for the most part. but there were a few lines farther down i kinda had to force to make them flow (i.e. "thats why i'm hittin bak at these fags,theyre chokin me wid these gags". i feel like there's too much in the underlined part, maybe try takin out "these". so its just "with gags")
i am by no means an expert, just somethin i had noticed and thought i'd comment on to hopefully give some helpful feed so you can improve

overall good drop tho. propz

[Arabian Shady]

you shud be a forensic lyricist,lol
yh i noticed that now,its probably cause i usually rap my drop while i make 'em so i mite have over looked that,thanks for pointing it out tho
more feeds please!!!
peace

[Jay-19]

This I liked, except from that part Hadez already pointed out. That some lines seems forced, and I couldn't really make 'em flow. but they rhymes were nice. And i'm a sucker for these type of lyrics, so great work! And keep it up!

[Arabian Shady]

thnx K.G
yh i'm workin on that part for ma next drop,
will drop soon

more feeds please,
peace

[Arabian Shady]

B.U.M.P
reviews ppl!!

[Xplode]

nice flow thrown up

[Arabian Shady]

tnnx fo the feed X
o yh n welcome to T.R.Shady
review ppl wen u feel its due so that wen its ur time ppl dont hesitate, stay active dude
peace

more feeds please

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

pretty good man, i like who you keep in line rhymes and end of line rhymes seperate but still keep it flowing good

i've had enough of this hatred,hearing religions being tainted
hearin the faintest n weakest diss could leave me just fainted
so before you think i've just made it,before the best that i've painted

that was my favourite bit coz it flows best for me

just work on the rhymes some were rather simple, but the flow was kool and you know what ya doin, keep it up man

[Arabian Shady]

wiked dude
thnx a lot for the review,i understand wat ur tryin ta say man
ima come bak hard wid more complex rhymes, n betta flow
peace


more reviews please!!!

[Steve Spag]

Wow man. Seriously, I'm fucking impressed. That whole thing was dope, nothing was wrong with it dude, you really stepped your shit up bro.