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I'm Back ;)....Victory

Postby Steve Spag » Jan 16th, '08, 01:20

Yeah I know I've been gone for a while but I've still been writing, haha. I'm actually releasing my new EP in a few months, so if you listen to my music, hit me up. Anyways, this peice here was just for fun. Just got high and wrote (kids, don't do drugs). Enjoy. (Sorry if you don't get the certain flow for it, I wrote this acapella, if you say it right though, it'll sound sick, lol.)

you point a gun at my boys face, i'll point one at yours//
you fuck with me i'll fuck you up, you whores ain't nothin but chores//
you wanna beef? then let it out, guaranteed i'll sweep the floor//
victory is served for me, this motherfucker settles scores//
defeat is what you're eating, have your tummy feeling sore//
your weakened feet are bleeding and your buddy's still ignored//
you're speakin' all these secrets, keep 'em coming to the floor//
i'm unleashin' all my demons, keep me runnin' from the ward//
Can't depend on all these faggots, just reliyin' on myself//
You want my pen and pad well have it, sianorya, peace in hell//
I'm the man that makes a difference, can't ya'll tell i'm something big?//
Yeah i know i'm kinda cocky, yeah my shit don't even stink//
I'm a physcopath rapper, a kid that's fucked inside//
Deep inside this kid's head, soo much time's gone by//
And what do I do? I just jot to the page//
And this sheet is now finished, Sincerely, Steve Spag//

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Re: I'm Back ;)....Victory

Postby patwivo » Jan 16th, '08, 06:41

very good
i loved every line :D
"You see me, I see through you. You say fuck me I say fuck you. You don't love me, I don't love you. I rise above and I say fuck you bitch!"
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Re: I'm Back ;)....Victory

Postby SajN » Jan 16th, '08, 09:48

Nice drop :y:
I had the flow, and the rhymes you are using are cool.
So it's a good drop. :y:
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Re: I'm Back ;)....Victory

Postby Jay-19 » Jan 16th, '08, 13:32

Yeah, I could find a flow in that! It's good! I loved some of the lines, especially those in the middle of the drop! That weas doe as hell! Keep it up! :y:
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Re: I'm Back ;)....Victory

Postby Xplode » Jan 16th, '08, 17:45

tats cool :P dude u r gud :P really sliced mothainterruptors
So Long Bitch U Did Me So Wrong
I Dont Want To Go On
Living In This World Without
You...........
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Re: I'm Back ;)....Victory

Postby Rain Matrix » Jan 16th, '08, 18:09

amazing huh

(from what I can tell) most of us blaze and drop

keep writing that dope stuff man
it's good
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Re: I'm Back ;)....Victory

Postby Steve Spag » Jan 16th, '08, 22:07

Thanks for the feed everyone, glad you liked that peice there. Anybody else got any feedback for me?
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