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Verse 20th January

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jan 20th, '08, 03:58

was just writing and seeing were it took me, no concept or anything just a bog standard verse

i can do it pen pencil or crayon
i still lay on untill the day gone
see that the timing of my rhyming is on point
like i be miming when im rhyming on this joint
the clock will tick on till i lock my spit gone
but i talk and slip none n know i have the last laugh
as i smash fast what they thought i wouldnt blast past
so really i see i bring reality to what i thought was only fantasy
for a fan to say you were grand today
so i planned the way scanned to slay
any man who weigh a foot in my way
so i go as i flow on a lonely road
the only mode available to be paid in full
or ill be made a fool, but succes i packed plenty
then i backed twenty wack men tae try resent me
as i present free skill n they re-invent feeble
in a tree full of week tools, you still aint the sharpest branch
you take the easy way ill conquer the hardest chance


Explination - Talk/Tock - as the clock ticks on it tocks and i slip none/i talk (as in rapping) and slip none
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Re: Verse 20th January

Postby Arabian Shady » Jan 20th, '08, 07:10

THAT WAS DOPE MAN :b:
all ur other 1's(since i've joined) havnt made ne sense, but this 1 was like out of the park.
wiked shit :y:
peace

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Re: Verse 20th January

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jan 20th, '08, 13:39

Arabian Shady wrote:THAT WAS DOPE MAN :b:
all ur other 1's(since i've joined) havnt made ne sense, but this 1 was like out of the park.
wiked shit :y:
peace

could you feed mine, i want a review frm one of the tr gr8's-its called half mast


thx man :y:

n yeh i aint been at my best writing wise for a while :sweating:
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Re: Verse 20th January

Postby SajN » Jan 20th, '08, 18:13

Nice drop Bar :y:
I like the rhymes you used and the flow was ok too.

I like these lines:

but i talk and slip none n know i have the last laugh
as i smash fast what they thought i wouldnt blast past

Keep It up. :y:

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Re: Verse 20th January

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jan 21st, '08, 02:54

NoN-Stop wrote:Nice drop Bar :y:
I like the rhymes you used and the flow was ok too.

I like these lines:

but i talk and slip none n know i have the last laugh
as i smash fast what they thought i wouldnt blast past

Keep It up. :y:

Can you feed mine too: The Future ?



thx man :y:
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Re: Verse 20th January

Postby Steve Spag » Jan 22nd, '08, 18:24

Nice drop man. Deffinetly liked what you did there. I liked your rhyme scheme for the begining of it, havn't seen it done like that in a while, haha.

If you got time, check out my latest piece "Victory" on this page and let me know what you think, I'd appreciate it, haha.
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Re: Verse 20th January

Postby Rain Matrix » Jan 22nd, '08, 18:34

I liked tha clock reference... good stuff
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