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Help Me To Say No

Postby Inzanity » Feb 1st, '08, 05:33

uh oh here we go again, back to the past of time forgotten
oh no a weary soul with in, back to what I lost then
on this paper I'm jotting, cuz' my heart has gone rotting
as my mind drift's away, to the source of the pain
I show no remorse in my shame, but to her of course it's a game
and what's worse is I play, my heart is torched with this pain
forced to engage, in this course of a maze,
and of course I'm amazed, as this tortures embraced
she's the source of the flame, torched in my brain

Heaven help me to say no, help me to let go
cuz' if I have her back, then I'm caught in the aftermath,
of yet again another shaddered past
So Heaven help me to say no, help me to let go

My mind keep's jotting back, I'm lost in the past
I've lost all I have, but that's just the cost of my act's
My thought's racing back, I must stop in my track's
Or once again Friday come's back, to her forgotten love
As I get lost in touch, I've lost enough
But I've got the rush, to go back to what is not true love
I've lost control, she's calling the shot's
my heart's lost and cold, this isn't love it's all in my thought's
but stalling I'm not, so I just fall in her plot, to take all that I've go


Heaven help me to say no, help me to let go
cuz' if I have her back, then I'm caught in the aftermath,
of yet again another shaddered past
So Heaven help me to say no, help me to let go
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Re: Help Me To Say No

Postby Rain Matrix » Feb 1st, '08, 07:16

it doesn't seem like u cna get much deeper than that

damn man... good job
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Re: Help Me To Say No

Postby Inzanity » Feb 1st, '08, 08:01

thanks for the feed Rain. It's much appricated :flower:


hoping for more feed back I will repay the favor
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Re: Help Me To Say No

Postby SajN » Feb 1st, '08, 08:16

Wow.
Nice drop EP :y:
You have great rhymes. The flow is good too.. Somewhere I lost the flow, but came back in.
Keep It Up :y:

Could you feed mine too .. The Future..
! Is He Nuts? No, He's InSajN !
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Re: Help Me To Say No

Postby Inzanity » Feb 1st, '08, 16:50

Thanx's for the the feed. I appreciate it. Well I left some feed on your's as well. hoping for more feed please.
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Re: Help Me To Say No

Postby Inzanity » Feb 2nd, '08, 15:04

*Bump*
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