NEW SHIT! Corruption & Control.

[Steve Spag]

Just wrote this peice here. Light up and started searching for beats on the net. I came across a really dark one and it just had this crazy melody on it so I had to write to it. This is one of those serious Steve Spag verses, lol. But don't take it all serious though, everyone's gotta vent their frustrations, lol. Hopefully you understand the flow for it. Anyways, enjoy and please leave some feed.

I know I grew up kinda quiet, don't mistake me for a fake//
There is an animal inside of me, it's best to stay away//
I've been bullied in the past, I've been actin' like a fool//
I know I'm fully in the cracks, so I'm shooting up my school//
Motherfuckers drove me crazy, I plea insanity//
I am going straight to hell and that's the way it had to be//
And when they send me straight to jail, gonna be right in the news//
Steve Spagnuolo was abused, no excuses, just the truth//
Plaintiff's going through my rap books, studying my words//
Puts examples in the court rooms just to show I'm soo disturbed//
What corrupted this kid? Was it the rap or the weed?//
It's that friend in the past that's always laughing at me//
So shut your mouth if your hating, I ain't looking your way//
I know that I'm gonna make it so I will book it today//
So say goodbye to the Steven, that you've already seen//
I'm alive and I'm breathin', I've awoken a dream//

This second peice was again written to a beat. I hope you get the right flow for it, 'cause it's a little different and really stands out on beat. Again, enjoy and leave some feedback.

It's been a while since we've talked, I don't know what's up//
What's going on in your life? Are you annoyed as fuck?//
By my raspy voice, will you listen to me?//
I am rapping 'cause it's efficient to see//
You always going soo crazy, hearing them tracks//
I ain't falling apart, 'cause I've already collapsed//
Having a laughing attack, you are withered in pain//
You're colder than the winter, you have entered insane//
I have entered your brain, cencorsed your gain//
I have cancelled your everything, inventor in vein//
I ain't taking no shit, I am saying this now//
If you're fucking with me, I am slaying you proud//
I am in control, you are at my will//
What I say, you do, automatic skill//
You're possesed oh yes, you are past your peak//
Now it's time to rest, have a nap and sleep//

Copywright: Steve Spag

[Ka0t1c]

i see hella potential for you man, you got a good vision on this so keep improving you skills.

[Wallace]

I played the beat from Encore by Em to rap this, the first part is perfect adjusted, but the second reallt get out on the first some final lines. The two pices are very good The first verse says about somethin that happenned to me in a little intensity in the past, but I not keeped up many hate because of this... just in my 2 begining songs I talked about this bullyin...

[SajN]

Good drop man..
I really loved the first one. I felt it, cus there's some lines which I can remember in my life.
The flow is also cool.

Second drop is also great, but I felt that those last lines almost threw my off the flow.
But itæs all good.

Keep It Up

[Arabian Shady]

ayy new steve spag shit!!!!!

1ist drop was wiked-flow, rhyming scheme,structure, al gd but rhymes were simple.try n vent ur feelings using metaphores n verbosities,that helps alot! all in all gd drop

2nd drop was gd, i had no difficulty wid the flow
advice:next time, if you can, post the beat so that it becomes easy to decide it it reali has flow.it'll help you become a perfectionist dude!

awesome shit

peace


ay steve if u havnt reviwed mine,could u do it? its called half mast

[Steve Spag]

Thanks for the feed everyone, I appreciate it.

The beat for the first peice was "Shot's Go" - http://www.soundclick.com/player/single ... i&newref=1

And the second peice was "Steel Toe" (Hopefully you get the flow for it on there, it's a really different beat) - http://www.soundclick.com/player/single ... i&newref=1

Keep the feed coming please

[patwivo]

dude i loved both of em
i listened to the shots go beat and put the words to it, it was amazing

just a little suggestion, when you get to this part below, you should get really loud and angry

So shut your mouth if your hating, I ain't looking your way//
I know that I'm gonna make it so I will book it today//
So say goodbye to the Steven, that you've already seen//
I'm alive and I'm breathin', I've awoken a dream//

thats the way i pictured it

[Steve Spag]

That first one was fucking awesome, pm me when you lay that down to a beat. Nice flow, nice everything on it.

I loved the second one, for some reason for a beat on it, I pictured something funky and sci fi.
very nice writing.

1: 10
2: 9 just cause I liked the first one better

Thanks a lot man, I appreciate it for real. At least 1 of them will be on the next EP I release soon, so I'll hit you up when that's on the net.

dude i loved both of em
i listened to the shots go beat and put the words to it, it was amazing

just a little suggestion, when you get to this part below, you should get really loud and angry

So shut your mouth if your hating, I ain't looking your way//
I know that I'm gonna make it so I will book it today//
So say goodbye to the Steven, that you've already seen//
I'm alive and I'm breathin', I've awoken a dream//

thats the way i pictured it

Yeah that's exactly how I have it planned, haha. Thanks for the feed man .

Keep the feed coming everyone

[Rain Matrix]

they were both damn good... propz on this steve

[Xray]

great lyrics man both verses were good but 1st one is the best..and the beat you used is absolutly dope man btw if you need a verse on that beat (shots go) than hit me up man that beat is dope as fuck

[Jay-19]

Really good drop! I love the 2 last lines in the first one. It fits perfectly!
Yeah, the lyrics are great, and I could flow nicely to it, so really good work!

[Kez]

Damn i put those lyrics to the beat it flows perfect, hot shit man

[Vettori]

Hmm pretty good, but i feel there wasnt enough complexity, like the one guy said metaphors, and even some reallyt good multis...i see small spots that would sounded sick with a differant flow change threwout the verse..But over all It was dope. I was actually workin on a project with the beat "shots go" i was gonna remove the chorus that was there/..and Put my own in lol...But Im not touchin that now lol, Anyways second one had some good ideas, but was off flow tremendously I say next time when you write..dont just stop when its done...Thats just the blueprint of the verse...You should always edit it, have a friend review it then edit it once more..Keep at it man..Ull get there

PS: you live in windsor correct?..I was just there on a roadtrip lol, and "accidentally dropped a grand on strippers at cheetahs LOL" was a fun roadtrip tho..tell ya boy spratt i said whats good too, I was listnin to sumthin of his a while back..anyways

Excellent job Just needs some more work

[Steve Spag]

Hmm pretty good, but i feel there wasnt enough complexity, like the one guy said metaphors, and even some reallyt good multis...i see small spots that would sounded sick with a differant flow change threwout the verse..But over all It was dope. I was actually workin on a project with the beat "shots go" i was gonna remove the chorus that was there/..and Put my own in lol...But Im not touchin that now lol, Anyways second one had some good ideas, but was off flow tremendously I say next time when you write..dont just stop when its done...Thats just the blueprint of the verse...You should always edit it, have a friend review it then edit it once more..Keep at it man..Ull get there

PS: you live in windsor correct?..I was just there on a roadtrip lol, and "accidentally dropped a grand on strippers at cheetahs LOL" was a fun roadtrip tho..tell ya boy spratt i said whats good too, I was listnin to sumthin of his a while back..anyways

Excellent job Just needs some more work

Thanks a lot man, I appreciate your feed, and I'll deffinetlty work on that shit. And yeah I live in Windsor, my and my boys were just at Cheetahs not too long ago either, hahah. That place is sweet .

And thanks to everyone else who's been feedin' this, I've been readin' your thoughts, and I appreciate your feedback.