I've been gone, gone too long!

by 4D » Feb 3rd, '08, 23:13

I've been gone, gone too long, too long to not do songs,
I`m back on song, black on white, writing got who gongs?
ME, that's who! Big, tattoo'd 'n dig statues from raw stone,
I smash dudes with drawn poem's like punches to Jaw Bones,
Gallstone size pain inside brains when I drop tales on LCD's,
I`m the rob scale of MP3's against the shops fail to sell CD's,
I dominate, nominate a common mate you think accomodates
Then watch amazed as a solemn page turns beef to Bolognese!

Was just bored, and felt like posting something. It's just something simple and quick, but any feedback would be cool!

by **Rain Matrix** » Feb 3rd, '08, 23:20

u make tha unatural rhymes seem natural

u should post more

by **Arabian Shady** » Feb 4th, '08, 06:18

A TEENY BOMB COMPARED TO YOUR OLD 1'S
rhymes were perfection,flow was gd,alll in all it was good
welcome bak 4d!
peace

could you please review mine,its called half mast,its a BIT old but i want another review by some one who knows what he's talkin about,thnx a bunch

by **SajN** » Feb 4th, '08, 15:42

Wow. It was really good.
I've unfortunately forgot your old stuff :sweating:

, so I can't compare this to them, but this one is really good.
You had great rhymes. And flow was good. :y:

Keep it up

Can you feed mine too.. It's called "The Future", there's another one called 3. verse too. And that one is linked to the future.

by 4D » Feb 4th, '08, 23:55

Thanks for the feedback people, been disinterested lately with the forum and writing. But gonna try and get back to dropping some verses here more regularly.