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A really dumb freestyle i wrote in like 10 minutes.

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A really dumb freestyle i wrote in like 10 minutes.

Postby zigz1234 » Feb 2nd, '08, 20:59

im a beast at his peak at least,
tahts what ive been told,
my chick is hot as shit,
shes a centerfold,
u cant place in this race,
i already taste the winners gold,
you know my flow will blow like a blizzard
lyrical wizard,
my rhymes are nice g, and icy like winters cold.
my skills thrill, there ill like pills xanax bars,
i take a hit of my bong sit down, see planets and stars,
i manage to cause panic at large like a titanical barge,
just burst open and let all the water flow.
killing people left and right like a slaughter show.
im hotter yo
then jessica alba,the left sink handle, lava and fire,
come to my concert and ill show you im the bravo igniter.
i went to your show and ill let you know ur not so fire.
set the microwave to full power and popped in a lighter.
watched the whole thing blow up like dynamite.
ill be thinking and freestyling got a mind that writes.
im hot right i can see my self in the spot light.
singing songs for millions of fans,
touring the world in millions of vans,
start with acapello then i fillin with bands,
smoking pot got the hook on gazillions of strands
cuz im the homie that always hawks venom,
ur the lonely ass punk that stalks women,
get a sack of herb and get served like tea with hot lemon
so sit back sip yak and watch the plot thickin.
this bitch is a pussy watch me lyrically drop kick him.
oh no the clocks ticking i need to think of a punch line.
fuck i hope i dont choke its fucking crunch time.
eat up these niggars with no chaser like lunch time.
cuz i got a punch drunk mind.
got that hawaiian punch kine.
im flying this blunts prime.



Let me know what you guys think.
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Re: A really dumb freestyle i wrote in like 10 minutes.

Postby Requiem » Feb 3rd, '08, 05:54

a couple of flow issues, but overall pretty good. :y: thought beginning was best part :happy:
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Re: A really dumb freestyle i wrote in like 10 minutes.

Postby Ka0t1c » Feb 3rd, '08, 07:27

im a beast at his peak at least,
tahts what ive been told,
my chick is hot as shit,
shes a centerfold,
u cant place in this race,
i already taste the winners gold,


that was the best part and then things got bumpy, keep at it man, i see some good things possible...
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: A really dumb freestyle i wrote in like 10 minutes.

Postby Rain Matrix » Feb 3rd, '08, 23:18

even out tha flow and u'll be good
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