Just A Song I wrote About Suicide.

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As i sit on my porch and watch my whole life fly past
All the pain around me makes my soul die so fast,
i try to last but im drowning quick,
always winnin battles,im renouned for wit,
but none of that matters when i take my own life,
the piercing on my heart is like a ice cold knife,
but i got one more deed before i leave earth,
i got to smoke a whole ounce of tree first,
then im gone like the smoke in the room,
silence in the night broke with a boom
the next morning my mom knocked then opened the door
she found my body laying all distort on the floor
sorry mom i couldnt let my failure hurt you no more
but i guess i just made ur pain worse
seeing me riding in a wood grain hearse
it must of broke your heart to see me lying in a coffin,
remebering sixteen years ago i was a baby crying so often
u couldnt even get a drop of sleep,
always had to set the clock to beep,
to make me go to school, so i wouldnt grow up a fool,
you always wanted me to get a degree and live the good life
but now im dead like the sea,like i fell on wood spikes,
like i stepped in front of a oncoming bus, like i was crushed by a anwing that bust
the dawning it must,
come for all who walk in valley of the shadow of death,
all my chips are spent i talleyed i got none of them left
i got to finish this verse before i run out of breath,
im hurrying now i got one stanza left,
im sorry mom that caused u grief
i guess i should of just paused at least capiche

Let me know what you guys think i got a whole bunch of other verses ive wrote too. Any criticism or suggestions would be appreciated.

[Rain Matrix]

tha suicide topics played out
go ahead and smoke that ounce

writing is cooler than being dead

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yeah i know the suicide thing is played out. It's actually a verse to a song me and my friends wrote. I know writing is kewler then being dead im not actually suicidal. I already smoked that ounce as a matter of fact lol