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The End.

Postby Ka0t1c » Feb 14th, '08, 20:47

is this the end
will i be coming back again to see my friends
or get killed overseas at Afghanistan?
well a million questions are in my head
cuz i deal with stress and depression's built up really bad man
what was i meant for in this land
cuz there's many wars that have spread
as i stepped onto the sand
im lookin back, God, Damn Uncle Sam
no more i want a uniform i can not stand
my future has been formed but instead of a happy human
im so sore, sad n brain dead, oh yeah, we're hard core
cuz heavy ruck sacks and we're airborne
the 82nd Armed Force looks better for the fans
but not from where i am of course
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: The End.

Postby liljon » Mar 3rd, '08, 18:32

good job
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Re: The End.

Postby Epidemik » Mar 4th, '08, 02:03

nice! good topic to touch on.

are you actually goin overseas?
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Re: The End.

Postby Ka0t1c » Mar 4th, '08, 09:02

actually im leaving from overseas, ive been here in afghanistan for 14 months !
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: The End.

Postby Epidemik » Mar 4th, '08, 17:30

oh no shit!???
thats crazy man... anything nuts happen over ther?? besides the everyday "normal, crazy" shit?
like have you seen combat or anything?
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Re: The End.

Postby Ka0t1c » Mar 4th, '08, 17:37

oh yeah, i've seen combat, i've been there... scary stuff
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: The End.

Postby Epidemik » Mar 4th, '08, 17:44

no shit! well at least your leaving man.. that must be damn good news.
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Re: The End.

Postby Rain Matrix » Mar 4th, '08, 17:51

man yur like a TR Soldier to tha 2nd power

good stuff
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Re: The End.

Postby Steve Spag » Mar 4th, '08, 19:35

Pretty deep shit. The structure and flow could have been a little better, but you deffinetly got the messege across. So, thumbs up from Steve :y: haha.
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Re: The End.

Postby Purple23Haze » Mar 6th, '08, 01:06

I liked it but I got a queston do you think your rhymes are better than mine?!
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Re: The End.

Postby Ka0t1c » Mar 6th, '08, 04:04

wow, c'mon, this isn't the contest section, but yes as a matter of fact i do and if u wanna find out the truth on who is the better rhymer between me and u, there is a way to make a poll or simply vote.
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: The End.

Postby Purple23Haze » Mar 6th, '08, 04:06

C'mon now no one here even likes me! would not be far due to favoritism so fuck that I just wanted to see if thats what you thought you answered my questions so thats The End.
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Re: The End.

Postby Ka0t1c » Mar 6th, '08, 04:18

ok, i see you wanna drop it, i understand but i gotta ask this...


Do you seriously think you're a better wordsmith than me?
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: The End.

Postby Purple23Haze » Mar 6th, '08, 04:44

Can't really say off of just this post man n I aint takin the time to look up the rest of your shit I'll just wait til I see more drops and I'll keep droppin but really if I took my time I can lay shit better than most. I aint bein cocky I'm just sayin when you constantly playin with words everyday man the third eye wakes up when you play with rhythym and rhyme all the time the earth quakes shakes cups cannabis or naturalist I'm an analyst examine THIS!
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