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Battle verse

Postby <VerbalTouch> » Apr 24th, '08, 22:35

2 bar battle


Ayo
Domino Ima leave you in limbo I'm sick enough to beat you with a lasso
Is that snow or is it Domino? I'll cut you leave you with only just a torso
Oh no your slow narrow minded I'm a psycho so follow a good flow
Disco sounds better I'ma kill you with a crossbow so motherfuck your ego
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Re: Battle verse

Postby Rain Matrix » Apr 24th, '08, 22:48

I liked it too bad it was so short... it was complex in a simple sort of way :confusion:
in any even it was all good keep it up... maybe add some length to it :y:
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Re: Battle verse

Postby <VerbalTouch> » Apr 25th, '08, 01:26

thanks but anyone could of beat this dude :y:
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Re: Battle verse

Postby Robbie G » Apr 25th, '08, 05:07

It wasn't bad, but I didn't really enjoy it.

Keep trying though cuz your pretty good. :y:
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Re: Battle verse

Postby <VerbalTouch> » Apr 26th, '08, 01:15

Thanks :y:
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Re: Battle verse

Postby -[Zach]- » Apr 26th, '08, 07:22

i thought it was pretty good. not bad for a battle verse. good job :y:
"Did you ever stop to think/I'm old enough to go to war but I ain't old enough to drink" - 2Pac

"It's time to let the truth be told/There ain't no brighter day/'Cause when it all unfolds/A n**** gon' just pass away/These haters tryna stop my grind/But I bet them hoes can't block my shine/So tired of takin' losses not this time/I can't save the whole world I'm just tryna look out for mine" - Z-Ro

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