Poem by a friend

[Hocky27]

This is a story of disgrace
Two people of a different race
Because they cant get along well
They will eventually, burn in hell
Running outside was jess and carl
They used to be the best of pals
But their vision will soon be blurred
By their parents corruptive word
You see this problem is idiotic
But can become very chaotic
It just so happened, it just so occured
One child was croation and one was serb

So these two grew up knowing hate
And forgot how they used to be mates
They both left home, had children
And so the pattern repeats again
I hope one day this cycle ends
So everyone can make amends
But for now, take my word
Only hatred exists between cros and serbs

What do you guys think of this ?

[skilzZ]

This is a story of disgrace
Two people of a different race
Because they cant get along well
They will eventually, burn in hell
Running outside was jess and carl
They used to be the best of pals
But their vision will soon be blurred
By their parents corruptive word
You see this problem is idiotic
But can become very chaotic
It just so happened, it just so occured
One child was croation and one was serb

So these two grew up knowing hate
And forgot how they used to be mates
They both left home, had children
And so the pattern repeats again
I hope one day this cycle ends
So everyone can make amends
But for now, take my word
Only hatred exists between cros and serbs

What do you guys think of this ?

[Inzanity]

yea that was dope

[Trigger]

pretty sik shit...keep it up

[BlaqReaper]

It was GREAT. Just a question though...how come every two lines rhymed except for this one?
"Running outside was jess and carl
They used to be the best of pals "

[Bubu]

Yeah !! my best friend is from serbia, so i kinda know how fucked up its over there