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[SSquared] - Beyond Dreams

Postby die2nite » Jul 20th, '08, 01:51

This is what I feel to be my favorite track I've ever recorded.

SSquared - Beyond Dreams
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This is beyond the outer limits of my imagination
Where doubt inhibits my lyrical emancipation
I vouch for forgiveness but receive no compensation
The fans are waiting for my, miracle restoration
This is empirical escalation, I've been proven ostentatious
Maybe I'm losing my patience, or I'm choosing to be anxious
Either way I'm instituting my place in
The G.O.A.T. is it me-oh-may-be
Lately, I’ve been pursuing impossible goals
Unachievable dreams that batter my inoperable soul
My sins caught a hold, of my exhausted mind
I’ve lost all sense of time, why bother dropping rhymes
I’m a monster I, fought my way through costless crimes
I’ve been bossed and sized up but I stay dauntless I
Just let myself float into the darkness that is my mind
If you can’t stand your world, then become a part of mine

This instance of reality…is beyond my dreams…
An anomaly…It’s taunting me
Come and study me…come and learn from me
If you wanna be, an asserted emcee
This instance of reality…is beyond my dreams…
An anomaly…It’s taunting me
Come and study me…come and learn from me
If you wanna be, an asserted emcee

I’ve been traveling through the dark canals of endless hope
Someone send me home, someone help me on this road
I’ve been marked for now to be isolated and left alone
With eyes dilated, head blown, trying to be Esco
Let’s go to a place I have yet to explore, a vast reservoir
I’ve been asked before, to tap my source, of crack metaphors
But I’ll blast metal doors, with damn incredible force
Just to reach the endless corridor, containing my reservoir
So I will end this war between my conscious and reality
I’m a pompous addled freak, but please don’t be mad at me
These are choices that I don’t want to catch up with me
But ones I must make to stop myself from battling me
So I challenge me, to one final standoff, a duel if you will
It’s not cruel, be real, this is the only justified way
I am honored to be heard in this electrified place
Bury me now, before I wreck my fate

I’m soaring through the skies…(soaring through the skies)
The rain’s pouring in my mind…(pouring in my mind)
Life just isn’t what it seems…(isn’t what it seems)
So I fly, I fly, I fly beyond my dreams…
I’m soaring through the skies…(soaring through the skies)
The rain’s pouring in my mind…(pouring in my mind)
Life just isn’t what it seems…(isn’t what it seems)
So I fly, I fly, I fly beyond my dreams…

This instance of reality…is beyond my dreams…
An anomaly…It’s taunting me
Come and study me…come and learn from me
If you wanna be, an asserted emcee
This instance of reality…is beyond my dreams…
An anomaly…It’s taunting me
Come and study me…come and learn from me
If you wanna be, an asserted emcee

There is a mass of energy conspiring over my head
And it’s tasked with sending me to a much dire end
I’ve tried to mend all problems with drastic remedies
But bastard enemies continue inspiring my death
I’m trying to fly my way over their heads toward peace
I dread decease, so I try to find someone to bless me
But does anyone love me, does anyone trust me
Will anyone save me from the reaper trying to touch me
And it’s ugly when no one raises their hand for me
Not even my family, so I remain down on knees
Head bowed, feeling the sharp tip against my neck
The night closes in, the darkness represents respect
And so I wonder why I even bother expressing myself
When I just end up regretting every word I ever felt
Like the humiliation of life, just isn’t enough it seems
But luckily, I can escape in the path beyond my dreams
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Re: [SSquared] - Beyond Dreams

Postby Kez » Jul 20th, '08, 02:20

Loved your lyrics and rhymes
Loved the concept
Quality sounds fine to me
Flow is good but veers off quite often
Hook was decent but needed to have more change in it to distinguish it from the verses
Beat is sick, obviously

Nice track though, lookin forward to more
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Re: [SSquared] - Beyond Dreams

Postby B.A.D. » Jul 20th, '08, 05:22

wow, lyrics are great, very very good

flow is great, but gets lost a bit sometimes

third verse is the best, and damn, I can relate good to ya methaphors

mixin is great, a lil more reverb could work

the track is top notch :y: :y: excelent work

but your voice needs more power, like more bass to it, I dunno

good potential
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Re: [SSquared] - Beyond Dreams

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Jul 20th, '08, 11:13

delievery is nice
pronouncation is almost perfect....just lil things that i could not follow maybe its my lack of english
i love the bridge...catchy..best part
dont hatin on the verses...all were very decent :y:
quality is good as always..
:y: good job
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Re: [SSquared] - Beyond Dreams

Postby Jay-19 » Jul 20th, '08, 14:30

The hook didn't work at all in my opinion, neither did the bridge. You got really good lyrics in this one though, but I don't think the delivery suited this type of track, I think it should be sadder. The flow is nice, although it sounds like you're rushing certain words to make it flow, like you're not saying the whole word, you should fix that. And the mixing is good, but like Ax-D said, a little reverb could spice the song up a little. Beat is really good, digging it.

Pretty good track. :y:
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Re: [SSquared] - Beyond Dreams

Postby Vettori » Jul 20th, '08, 22:03

Ill be honest i didnt listen to the whole thing... But what i did hear was pretty good...Seems there is alot of forced rhyming. and bigger words then there should be, Big words just equal more syllobles, and sometimes they sound Wierd, Cause they arent used in real life so much Lol. The main idea is to try to get across what ur trying to say, and if people have to think to much...They'll give up. anyways just my opinion...Good job tho, Ur Gettin ahead now, :y:
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Re: [SSquared] - Beyond Dreams

Postby Tash8 » Jul 20th, '08, 22:06

I didn't listen to it yet, cuz i'm kinda of busy but I wanna show you something, your rhyming in what i read which were first 6 lines WERE awful man, here i'll show you why

This is beyond the outer limits of my imagination
Where doubt inhibits my lyrical emancipation
I vouch for forgiveness but receive no compensation
The fans are waiting for my, miracle restoration
This is empirical escalation, I've been proven ostentatious
Maybe I'm losing my patience, or I'm choosing to be anxious


You rhymed:
4 tions together
2 ious together

that's not rhyming, that's just like repeating...

besides ur first 2 rhymes
imagination
emancipation

which were fine because imag and eman also rhymed and their diff.. but the rest were horrible
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Re: [SSquared] - Beyond Dreams

Postby die2nite » Jul 21st, '08, 00:22

Tash8 wrote:I didn't listen to it yet, cuz i'm kinda of busy but I wanna show you something, your rhyming in what i read which were first 6 lines WERE awful man, here i'll show you why

This is beyond the outer limits of my imagination
Where doubt inhibits my lyrical emancipation
I vouch for forgiveness but receive no compensation
The fans are waiting for my, miracle restoration
This is empirical escalation, I've been proven ostentatious
Maybe I'm losing my patience, or I'm choosing to be anxious


You rhymed:
4 tions together
2 ious together

that's not rhyming, that's just like repeating...

besides ur first 2 rhymes
imagination
emancipation

which were fine because imag and eman also rhymed and their diff.. but the rest were horrible


This is beyond the outer limits of my imagination
Where doubt inhibits my lyrical emancipation
I vouch for forgiveness but receive no compensation
The fans are waiting for my, miracle restoration
This is empirical escalation, I've been proven ostentatious
Maybe I'm losing my patience, or I'm choosing to be anxious

Shit if that's awful, then what do you consider good?

Oh and to everyone else, much props on the feeds!

And to vettori, sorry the words were too big for you, next time I'll throw in some cat-bat-hat rhymes just for you ;)
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Re: [SSquared] - Beyond Dreams

Postby Tash8 » Jul 21st, '08, 00:44

i wasn't talking about ur internal multis, you could make the most complex rhyming scheme and end with those rhymes i stated and it'll sound horrible

just a tip, cuz i thought lyrically your pretty good.
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Re: [SSquared] - Beyond Dreams

Postby die2nite » Jul 23rd, '08, 08:00

Bump.
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