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battling my poisons

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battling my poisons

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 5th, '08, 23:00

it really is ur choice to choose
but i wish of course that you'd
install me a bigger voice to use
yet still as always, i enjoy my shoes
even if i dont hardly avoid the blues
cuz im being on point with news
so there is nothing i am going to lose
i wont let anyone come and destroy whats true
from when i was a boy confused
up to a soldier who's
already been deployed since i joined this crew
and while paranoia brewed
my stories grew
b/c i was employed to prove i have a voyage due
which i was appointed thru
my own doin, i enjoy to persue
i show no ruined joints and roots
... im battling my poisons soon
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: battling my poisons

Postby Rain Matrix » Aug 6th, '08, 15:58

I'll remark on yur flow cuz it was remarkable :y: :y:
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Re: battling my poisons

Postby The Toy Soldier » Aug 6th, '08, 18:52

better up ur rhymes they a littl close to being simple
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Re: battling my poisons

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 6th, '08, 22:12

lol, vocab is not the point of THIS piece, check out my lyrical rhymes
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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