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MY MESSAGE

Postby Arabian Shady » Aug 13th, '08, 19:18

i wrote this specially so that it falls on the eve of my country's independance day, this "piece" basically has a glimpse of what my people go thru everyday and how we are still being cast negatively,it has frustration and some question which i hope you all can ask yourselves,
i accept that many poeple might not like what i wrote but i feel that a PORTION of the truth must be told,hence this is MY MESSAGE


Furthermore,to all the verses I wrote sans all the things that I said,
One half's snapping out of a trance, the rest got a gun to my head
I've started playin for my country,I got the bombs in my hand
I'm about to detox the whole situation with another big bang,
Ya'll can take out the mickey,All you people with hickey's while
my sick brothers HUNT for bread ,Ya'll be SHOOTIN at pussy
Tension's keen on , risin up quick, in every hood that its hit,
with no static in the streets,every body here, owns a -matic.
we got a crisis on hand, everybody's confused, with all comodities lost
we all beggin for food,everybody in the hoods' got tissues thin as tissues
we gave a billion , in chariity and every cent got misused, shit,
even drinking bottled water here's got its issues, yet we STILL
Taleban supporters,terrorism promoters,with all the problems
We got, can we give it a shoulder? Can we roll wid dem posers?
shit, i know that its true,every bomb and its wire and every sickening
tool,every myestery bullet originates from our roots, you have
a right to get mad,you wana fight cause you sad,but have you ever,
given thought, if my whole country's like that?are we realy that bad?
THEY'RE like one fish in the ocean , the N-bomb on my songs
but if your gonna judge us like that, lemme prove myself wrong.
give this silly verse some thought,not alot just a little,while this
idea's born,can you take the time out to pass my message along?

A few notes:
'One half': of people..
Static: refers to the 16 hour black out's we have due to lack of electricity,every major city has this problem
"Comodities lost..." :pakistan is basically an agricultural country,we are one of the biggest producers of wheat,maize,rice,etc.. in the southern half of the WORLD,yet people still have nothing to eat,critics believe that this is due to secret affidavites signed by afghanistan and pakistan to export such comodities leaving the public itself hungry,pakistan also has a major water problem..its not that we dont have water,we dont have enugh purification plants,ppl end up drinkin(out of neccesity) HIGHLY impure water.
Last year,2007, the public of pakistan donated around 65 billion rupeees in charity,(we have extremely rich ppl,but no concience) to the government out of which only 15-20 million were put to a wellfare program started by the government,the rest just "dissapeared".
Ask yourself some of the questions....can you truthfully answer them??

I wellcome criticism,tear my verse down :smoking:

I just need REVIEW's
Peace :b:
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We're all on the same page, Yet we're standing apart on different lines'
So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
"Front Page",Arabian Shady


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Re: MY MESSAGE

Postby notoriouS-K-M » Aug 13th, '08, 21:24

Dude i won't even tell you that your rhymes, structure, flow are good cuz you already know it.

What I AM gonna say is that I completely agree with you on what you said. About the load shedding, the terrorism issue, the adulteration, the corruption, everything. And this is not even a quarter of the half of what's happening. Good to see some quality socio-political shit about pak. Cool dude. Keep it up.
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Re: MY MESSAGE

Postby Arabian Shady » Aug 14th, '08, 07:49

LOL, I'm glad you saw my vision,see you living in Pakistan face problems like these in your day to day life,My idea was to project this information in a whole new light and relate it to the problems that MUSLIMS around the world face...
I reali appriciate you takin the time to check this out :y: ,if only other people would be open minded and respond to this after reading it... :angry:
By the way... HAPPY INDEPENDANCE DAY BRO :b: :flower:
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We're all on the same page, Yet we're standing apart on different lines'
So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
"Front Page",Arabian Shady


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Re: MY MESSAGE

Postby Xray » Aug 14th, '08, 12:20

Furthermore,to all the verses I wrote sans all the things that I said,
One half's snapping out of a trance, the rest got a gun to my head
I've started playin for my country,I got the bombs in my hand
I'm about to detox the whole situation with another big bang,

holy shit man, that's sick as fuck, crazy crazy way to start a song :worship:

Tension's keen on , risin up quick, in every hood that its hit,
with no static in the streets,every body here, owns a -matic.

nice but the "owns a-matic" doesn't go well, i recon you should of had something like "owns a right to panic".

THEY'RE like one fish in the ocean , the N-bomb on my songs
but if your gonna judge us like that, lemme prove myself wrong.
give this silly verse some thought,not alot just a little,while this
idea's born,can you take the time out to pass my message along?

fucking sick man.

this destroys your older piece, without hesitation! the flow is spectacular. the message is told greatly almost, great points said. really liked this verse man, BIG ASS improvement from your last post. keep this good shit up.
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Re: MY MESSAGE

Postby Arabian Shady » Aug 14th, '08, 16:36

mad fukin props to you both!!!!!
@x-ray:dude i cant belive the reception man,i am realy glad u liked it,I'm half Paki and half Emarati i mean from the United arab emirates,so i try and include different aspects frm both worlds,but you takin your time out is phenominal
@Mcmaybe:i was actually on tenterhooks when i Pm'ed you cause i knew i was askin a Pro for criticism and you like to tear people down :happy: ,haha , but i just wana thank you for appreciating this verse and takin your time out
MORE REVIEWS PEOPLE!!! :worship:
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So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
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Re: MY MESSAGE

Postby Xray » Aug 14th, '08, 16:58

Arabian Shady wrote:I'm half Paki and half Emarati i mean from the United arab emirates

glad to know man, and yeah holla at me when you post your next piece :y: :smoking:
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Re: MY MESSAGE

Postby SajN » Aug 14th, '08, 17:01

Whoa great piece man!
I got to agree with what notorious K-M said:

"What I AM gonna say is that I completely agree with you on what you said. About the load shedding, the terrorism issue, the adulteration, the corruption, everything. And this is not even a quarter of the half of what's happening. Good to see some quality socio-political shit about pak."


I'm Paki too so this is something good :y:

Good rhymes too and good concept :y:
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Re: MY MESSAGE

Postby Arabian Shady » Aug 14th, '08, 17:15

:worship: :worship:
thanks alot for chekin it out man, i feel for my country, i visited pakistan in june and i was like wtf is goin on? why doesnt the government do anything, i mean i had all these questions and shit ..and then on the other side you had all these bombings happenin and every 1's mad at you,pointing fingers and sayin that your responsible .. so i decided to just keep it in mind to create something new, i mean a new mentality,something that ppl can relate to,u know? the only thing that brings ppl tgether is fear,it could be of anysort man, but i took the frustration that the people felt and TRIED to voice it in a way that poeple AROUND THE WORLD recognised, and then ask them , your feelin the same, so are we as bad as you say we are???
ne ways i'ma stop with the sermon, and ask for...MORE REVIEWS PPL! :worship:
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So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
"Front Page",Arabian Shady


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Re: MY MESSAGE

Postby SajN » Aug 14th, '08, 17:18

I just came back from Pakistan few days ago actually.
But even if you hear many negative things in the news about us, it's actually cool being there! :y:
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Re: MY MESSAGE

Postby SkinNBlista » Aug 14th, '08, 21:09

Hey, I'd just like to say that reading your Piece was in itself eye opening for me. I get rallied up when I understand politics (after we decifer the bullshit and get the point)...

Anywayz, first verse was your ammo in getting your point across.
Lyrically it flowed well and portrayed your point well.
Ur talking for real which is always good. :y:

I dont know much of Pakistan except that they play cricket :whistle:
Whateva u wanna say, go ahead coz we dont play.
Every word taken to heart, supersensitive, arent u smart.
So how next r u gonna use it, laugh in my face is to abuse it.
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Re: MY MESSAGE

Postby Arabian Shady » Aug 15th, '08, 10:35

lol, thnx alot for chekin it out, :worship:
After reading your comments i feel happy to know that my message has been delivered,
Me as a non resident half paki,i know the type of shit that other ppl feel or even think of,and its hard to convince that we arnt realy like that or its not reali "US" that wants THIS type of attention..cause other ppl respond to a painted picture,no body is realistic,shit i thought i would get slammed for talkin about a subject like that :p
cricket aint reali my sport,I'm more into volleyball and basketball :whistle:
MORE REVIEWS PEOPLE!!! :worship:
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We're all on the same page, Yet we're standing apart on different lines'
So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
"Front Page",Arabian Shady


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Re: MY MESSAGE

Postby Rain Matrix » Aug 17th, '08, 16:05

I've started playin for my country,I got the bombs in my hand
I'm about to detox the whole situation with another big bang,

crazy rhymes and dope lines yur definitly improving now :y: :y:
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Re: MY MESSAGE

Postby Arabian Shady » Aug 19th, '08, 09:35

:worship: :worship:
thanks alot bro, your review highlights it all, its me sure that this was ACTUALLY tight,lol
MORE REVIEWS IF POSSIBLE :flower:
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We're all on the same page, Yet we're standing apart on different lines'
So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
"Front Page",Arabian Shady


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Re: MY MESSAGE

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 22nd, '08, 04:18

this is incredible!
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: MY MESSAGE

Postby Arabian Shady » Aug 22nd, '08, 08:49

lol thnx alot man, i was surprised to see this thread up!
dont wana push but review's are wellcome :shifty:
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We're all on the same page, Yet we're standing apart on different lines'
So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
"Front Page",Arabian Shady


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