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[New] A New Short Track from Bar

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jul 31st, '08, 03:45

doest really have a title, its just a short track :y:


produced by leatherface, rhyme aslyums producer check him out hes dope :y: mixed by tash (props man)

http://www.zshare.net/audio/1627226824552aa0/


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i aint the best rapper alive but i will wrap up you best rapper
and make sure hes not alive, im just looking to be
the most potent mc, so i can flow and then flee
and live my life n just forget about the microphone
but thats twenty years from now when the hype is gone
now i write my song n take a peice of your brain so i can light my bong
then smoke your vocab i broke your whole dab, dont get that im no mad
coz most are to casual n then i turn casual, take you to green street
n none of your are matching me, leave you and your whole crew banged up in the casualty
i aint the worst rapper alive, but could take the worst rapper
n make sure his careers got a life, its all about the strategy
like when im strapping yeh to the electric chair
just to erect a hair over the top methods just to perfect the snare
i put glue on my waveform screw what the hate from
i chew most debate forms, this means war, you better run if you hate storms
i aint your average mc, i take the average mc, and make there average NC
typically your face blank i lyrically dont face shank
always hit the green when i take the T-off and i always get a A+
so now the AA team member just got his name changed to mister
n there towing this beat coz i breakdown the breaksounds
dam i shakegrounds, when its the end ill take bows
but for now i try make crowds and be the wars foundation
as we build a whole nation just to put pateince to swords
i belong amoungst lords


will fix grammer in typed lyrics tomorrow, feed is apreciated :y: couple of lines in there that are either refering to slang or UK terms, and one really complex that people might not get, i wont say witch line lets see if anyone notices lol, if you dont understand a line ask and ill explain :y:
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Re: [New] A New Short Track from Bar

Postby gladimnotsoluble » Jul 31st, '08, 04:00

Lyrics-Good
Beat-Interesting
Flow-Sometimes drifted off

I'm actually liking this short, quick slashing type song it's good
I like it, 4/5

And despite your accent which makes it difficult for me to understand, reading the lyrics you're still striking hard, and you have some clever lines, so good job
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Re: [New] A New Short Track from Bar

Postby TheWeirdoIsBack » Jul 31st, '08, 04:00

Pretty dope man. The flow was flawless, I wasn't sure how it was gonna work reading the lyrics but you freaked it. Some great lines in there bro, I loved that "light my bong then smoke your vocab" especially. There was a few parts I didn't get 100%, and the rhyming wasn't that advanced, but better than the average. Overall, for a short what minute and a half? Great shit :y:
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Re: [New] A New Short Track from Bar

Postby Kez » Jul 31st, '08, 04:47

Beat was sick, delivery was sick, lyrics were sick
Track was sick :y:

And i loved "You better run if you hate storms" :worship:
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Re: [New] A New Short Track from Bar

Postby Jay-19 » Jul 31st, '08, 10:42

The accent ruins the track for me.

But lyrics are good, and beat is good.
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Re: [New] A New Short Track from Bar

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Jul 31st, '08, 10:58

good short track as sticcy said flow drifted off somtimes
but lyrics are dope
hadnt much problems wit ur accent lol
one thing about the mixing the overlays were mixed...weird...very hollow and idk just didnt feel it :unsure:
altho good job
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Re: [New] A New Short Track from Bar

Postby <Stiiccy> » Jul 31st, '08, 12:49

as sticcy said

i didnt say anything yet lol

anyway flow was great
lyrics were great..
beat was cool
accent was a factor here
i wasnt really feelin the track tho homie
like everything was good dont get me wrong...but i didnt really feel it

6/10
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Re: [New] A New Short Track from Bar

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jul 31st, '08, 12:57

gladimnotsoluble wrote:Lyrics-Good
Beat-Interesting
Flow-Sometimes drifted off

I'm actually liking this short, quick slashing type song it's good
I like it, 4/5

And despite your accent which makes it difficult for me to understand, reading the lyrics you're still striking hard, and you have some clever lines, so good job



thanks man, apprciate the feedback and glad you liked it :y:

TheWeirdoIsBack wrote:Pretty dope man. The flow was flawless, I wasn't sure how it was gonna work reading the lyrics but you freaked it. Some great lines in there bro, I loved that "light my bong then smoke your vocab" especially. There was a few parts I didn't get 100%, and the rhyming wasn't that advanced, but better than the average. Overall, for a short what minute and a half? Great shit :y:


thank man appreciate it, and yeh i wasnt goin for the rhyming in this track, i was just tryna do some smart little lines all my other tracks the complexity i work on is 80% on the amount of rhymes so i decided to try something different, glad you enjoyed it and thanks for checking :worship:

Kez wrote:Beat was sick, delivery was sick, lyrics were sick
Track was sick :y:

And i loved "You better run if you hate storms" :worship:



thanks man, appreciate it :y:

KillahGoat wrote:The accent ruins the track for me.

But lyrics are good, and beat is good.


fair enough man, thanks for taking the time to listen appreciate it :y:

°[~CHR!$~]° wrote:good short track as sticcy said flow drifted off somtimes
but lyrics are dope
hadnt much problems wit ur accent lol
one thing about the mixing the overlays were mixed...weird...very hollow and idk just didnt feel it :unsure:
altho good job


thanks man, appreciate the feedback :y: , on the mixing front thats my fault, i was recording this track and had 1 take of it, then i was listening to the take and just didnt know what to think, i didnt know if i liked it or if it flowed good enough ect. ect. so i stopped working on it, then i ran out of recording time and i couldnt record anything else for it, so the vocals sound hollow because they are just one take, and the overlays arent actual overlays because i never recorded any for it, then i was goni mix it properly to see if i liked it and tash offered to do it for me, i think he great with limited resources lol, thanx again man :y:

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as sticcy said

i didnt say anything yet lol

anyway flow was great
lyrics were great..
beat was cool
accent was a factor here
i wasnt really feelin the track tho homie
like everything was good dont get me wrong...but i didnt really feel it

6/10



thanks man appreciate the feedback, cant like everything right :p thanks for checking it out :y:
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Re: [New] A New Short Track from Bar

Postby Xray » Aug 3rd, '08, 14:10

sorry for the late feed, my comps been a major bitch. 2 days ago i done a system recovery than today my comp got fucked up again, so i formatted it. i hope it doesnt fuck up again, and yeah fuckin lost all my shit!!

first of all, tash great fuckin job bro, love the mixing.

beat is dope man, laid back raw shit.

lyrics are well matched with the beat.

flow is sick man, your best so far imo.

delivery, loved it! pronounciation was great, understood the whole song.

sick song man, again tash great mixing and sick flow man :worship:
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Re: [New] A New Short Track from Bar

Postby Speech » Aug 4th, '08, 09:46

liked your last short track more....wasn feeling this..dunno why just didn dig the pronnounciation...you done way better...

lyrics were tight though//slick shit, but the writing was better than the spitting, thatz just my opinion....flow was cool, but your vocals were too low (or is it my ears :unsure: )
oh well...couldn really understand too much of the track but as i said, lyrics were tight...

is it me or did you master your accent better back then, cuz i didn use to have problems with is...this time i had a hard time understanding...anywayz

keep it up
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Re: [New] A New Short Track from Bar

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Aug 4th, '08, 20:59

Killa wrote:ohhh me likes me likes. diffrent type of beat to what your normally on and you flow great on it, the little pauses where a nice touch and screw what people say about accents youve come on alot since not hiding it so much.


thanks man, appreciate it :y:

Xray wrote:sorry for the late feed, my comps been a major bitch. 2 days ago i done a system recovery than today my comp got fucked up again, so i formatted it. i hope it doesnt fuck up again, and yeah fuckin lost all my shit!!

first of all, tash great fuckin job bro, love the mixing.

beat is dope man, laid back raw shit.

lyrics are well matched with the beat.

flow is sick man, your best so far imo.

delivery, loved it! pronounciation was great, understood the whole song.

sick song man, again tash great mixing and sick flow man :worship:


thanks man, appreciate it alot :worship: glad you liked it :8)

Speech wrote:liked your last short track more....wasn feeling this..dunno why just didn dig the pronnounciation...you done way better...

lyrics were tight though//slick shit, but the writing was better than the spitting, thatz just my opinion....flow was cool, but your vocals were too low (or is it my ears :unsure: )
oh well...couldn really understand too much of the track but as i said, lyrics were tight...

is it me or did you master your accent better back then, cuz i didn use to have problems with is...this time i had a hard time understanding...anywayz

keep it up


yeh writing is my stronger point than spitting it, and idk i thought the pronouncation on this was the clearest since i started puting my accent in more :sweating: anywae, thanks for the feedback, appreciate it :8)
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Re: [New] A New Short Track from Bar

Postby Tornado » Aug 6th, '08, 02:49

zshare is being a bitch right now...sendspace anyone?
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Re: [New] A New Short Track from Bar

Postby Kez » Aug 6th, '08, 04:10

Tornado wrote:zshare is being a bitch right now...sendspace anyone?


Oh, so it's not just me! :p
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Re: [New] A New Short Track from Bar

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Aug 22nd, '08, 01:09

bump ?
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Re: [New] A New Short Track from Bar

Postby mart85 » Aug 22nd, '08, 23:10

nice track! flow was cool, and like killa, I liked the little pauses here and there etc... some nice multies too... pretty much everything was on point... you explained why it sounded hollow so I'm not gonna point it out again lol, but since it sounds hollow, the vocals should have been a bit louder IMO... and some words sounded like they could have been pronounced better, but overall it was good

and the whole vibe was nice, I liked it, keep it up :y:

oh and I didn't have any problem with your accent :happy:
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