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[Angevilish]

(don't know about the rules regarding feeds before posting a new track, I'm new in here, but I gave feeds for 5 different artists)

This is the first single off my new album, I wrote this long time ago & recorded it in the early 2007. But I re-recorded with minor changes...
The 1st 42 seconds is a skit, but I upped the skit a long with the song to make it easier for you to listen to them both directly...
http://www.soundclick.com/Iphorill

Lyrics:
{Verse1}
A for agony, the only human mate
B for the brutal battle between you & fate
in a state of hate you spend most ya time
you think things will get better? You lost ya mind
C {see} nuthin? but adversity after adversity
yes you deserve pity from God but where is he?
D for the depressin? day till you?re damn dead
don?t defy what destiny demanded
E for the everlasting emotion of fears
they die hard, just like the devotion of tears
they keep on pouring through the eyes till your demise
but what make you lose ya mind & truly drives
you to suicide is when the tears flow on
on ans on , and the years go on
& F {if} you still got hope, G {gee} you?re a moron
H for hold on to grief, joy is forgone

{Hook1}
I need some arms to hold me now
I asked my loved ones but they sold me out
X2

{Verse2}
J for the joyless jungle a.k.a world
you can struggle but you can?t stay firm
K for the killer knock outs keep on knockin? you
& to top it off you see people mockin? you
L for the love that I never received
thus I never believed, thus my heart is deceased
M for melancholy but nut much more than
misery & mournin? for being born N {in}
this nasty notorious nerve-rackin? planet
you try to cope but you just can?t stand it
O for the most sound every one produces
people claim to be sad for you but the truth is
it amuses them whenever you do this
you?re the one who gives & take nuthin? but abuses
P for pursuin? pleasure, Q for quit it
cuz you?ll never ever figure how to get that treasure

{Hook2}
R {are} you there....can anyone hear me
I am scared....I am sincerely
X2

{Verse3}
S for straight sufferin? & senseless survival
I?m still seekin? someone or sumthin? to die for
T for trifle, the technical title of existence
between U {you} & joy a big distance
I can?t dig this tense sh*** day by day
every day for passin? away I pray
V for Vendetta between reality & your dreams
the lord seems to like sore themes
W for the wound within which is festerin?
no one interested in not even ya next to kin
X for Xellin? at receivin? ferocity
pain is life?s proceedin? philosophy
Y {why} life has to be this ruthless?
they say struggle is a must but to me it?s useless
Z for zero chances in livin? happily ever after
always agony never laughter

{Hook3}
I ran out of letters but I still got plenty of pain
unexplained, is it for a reason or is it in vain
X5

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didnt listen but i think papoose murdered this concept so bad that no one else should ever put it on track lol

[<VerbalTouch>]

didnt listen but i think papoose murdered this concept so bad that no one else should ever put it on track lol

same its like the 3rd time ive seen this concepts too old but ill check out the mix soon

[<Stiiccy>]

tiight ass beat...sweet concept
i loved the hook
lyrics were decent
flow was off alot
accent was preety unique
delivery was preety good
quality was bad
but overall it was cool
6/10

[Angevilish]

Hmmmm. I have mixed thoughts... The flow was off a lot, but overall was the best point. What accent is that? Works well with the quality sometimes, but sometimes it's a little annoying. The lyrics were decent.
Concept is GREAT. I think you should rewrite this, adjust it a bit...

mad props for the feed bro...English is a foreign language to me, My 1st language is Arabic, that's the cause of my awful accent! lol But I'm tryin' hard to practice it, it's affecting my delivery...

didnt listen but i think papoose murdered this concept so bad that no one else should ever put it on track lol

Appreciate you coming by...But I just wanna say that Papoose's song was surely sick in terms of lyricism & flow. However, it had no theme, concept, idea, what so ever. If you disagree then I'd love if you mention one single thought presented in the song... it was a sick punchline, lyrical song, but with no concept...
More over, it had enormous alliteration demonstration which was certainly perfect, but the multi-syllabic rhymes were semi-absent...& we can always quote the lyrics & highlight the rhymes & discuss this further more, but of course in else section...
& there are many other differences between Pap's shit & mine. His beat was ordinary, mine was original regardless of the fucked up quality lol!. He had no hooks, I had singing hooks with smart wordplaying. his delivery was amazing, mine was awful lol!. Anyways, just wanted to clear things up.

tiight ass beat...sweet concept
i loved the hook
lyrics were decent
flow was off alot
accent was preety unique
delivery was preety good
quality was bad
but overall it was cool
6/10

Thanx for the feed...much respect!

[gladimnotsoluble]

Sorry, Papoose already murdered this--no matter how good you do it

[Angevilish]

lol go up one post!

[<Stiiccy>]

Thanx for the feed...much respect!

yeh feed my shit bruh

[B.A.D.]

wtf is wrong with ppl these days

"Papoose already murdered this"... so what???... do whatever the fuck you want to do

about the track, the lil piano skit is cool, nice idea with that particular play

now the track itself, u need to fix the quality ASAP... sounds horrible (mastering wise, mixing wise)

lyrcs are decent, I see plenty of nice methaphors there, I dig that, nice stuff

hook: singin is not your best aspect, but the concept of it itself its amazing

flow needs improving a bit, but still works fine

good job

[Angevilish]

wtf is wrong with ppl these days

"Papoose already murdered this"... so what???... do whatever the fuck you want to do

about the track, the lil piano skit is cool, nice idea with that particular play

now the track itself, u need to fix the quality ASAP... sounds horrible (mastering wise, mixing wise)

lyrcs are decent, I see plenty of nice methaphors there, I dig that, nice stuff

hook: singin is not your best aspect, but the concept of it itself its amazing

flow needs improving a bit, but still works fine

good job

^Thank you so much for making your comment useful & for the constructive feed you said..I'll definitely work on many things & re-do the song later...
props...

quality like axe said, it needs to mixed better...I'm not a big dick about quality, but some mixing would make it alot more listenable.

Lyrics were awesome, I tried this concept once...and failed lol

Need to work on your singing lol work on that high note

I kinda liked the flow, but seems like i'm the only one lol

good track, nice 1st single

where are you from?

thanx man...appreciate that you listened to it.
I'm from teh middle east, English is not my 1st language, that's why I had that accent...

[<Stiiccy>]

middle east

terrorist

[Angevilish]

your welcome, and have fun on this site

I think your the 3 or 4 rapper we have on here from the middle east

really! who they are? I might get to know them...

terrorist

Yeah!!! I can blow up any second! lol

[Xray]

middle east

terrorist

lol don't mind sticcy, his just fucking around

welcome good to have another arab in this forum, where abouts you from?

everyone else said what i was going to say, so yeah fix that quality. good lyrics, but you definitely need to re-record that but than i don't know how good you are and that could be your best you can do. good job though

[Angevilish]

lol I know sticcy was kidding!
tahnx for the feed man...I'll re-record that song later. I'm from Jordan

[Xray]

the infection...is from Pakistan, but doesn't live there anymore

X-ray as you just found out

and someone else, but I forget who

mc maybe, arabian shady

cool man jordan, lotta iraqis in jordan aye