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[Angevilish]

you're damn right! Population must have rised by one million thanks to them! lol
where are you from Xray?

[Xray]

you're damn right! Population must have rised by one million thanks to them! lol
where are you from Xray?

Half Iraqi half Irany

[<VerbalTouch>]

well man not bad at all gotta say you sounded like rain matrix at first but got better as it went only thing i suggest is fix the pops kinda heard some static or is that jsut the beat duno but cool track

[Angevilish]

^well, don't worry I had dealt with many people like those...I know what to do!
I'm glad you had the chance to visit Jordan, I hope my fellow citizens didn't do anything embarrasing! lol...& thanx for welcoming me officially! love to be legit...

well man not bad at all gotta say you sounded like rain matrix at first but got better as it went only thing i suggest is fix the pops kinda heard some static or is that jsut the beat duno but cool track

good lookin'...thanx a lot man. I'll fix the beat & the whole thing later...

[<Stiiccy>]

and im proud to be an american where atleast i know im free

[<VerbalTouch>]

and im proud to be an american where atleast i know im free

life aint free if you talk wit sticcy z

[<Stiiccy>]

and im proud to be an american where atleast i know im free

life aint free if you talk wit sticcy z

lolz

[Speech]

fix that quality
step up the flow a little
keep up the emotion given in the track, it was good
didn sing the hook too good but i'm getting the message in it (even tho you say there is none lmao)
well all i can say is that you got potential and shouldn listen to more than half of the ppl here giving terrible feed back, they can't do it better and seek a reason to bring down your work..of course there are better rappers on this site but it's all about the community so apreciate help, ignore sensless hating
i didn like the track too much but like i said don't let that bring down your work or ego or anything..but you look like you can handle this
keep on makin songs boy!
peace

ps : why you tr fuckers always compare ppl to major rapper's? like we ever gon reach papoose or whoever...stop that man!

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

people always take shit the wrong way on here now a days

why you tr fuckers always compare ppl to major rapper's? like we ever gon reach papoose or whoever...stop that man

comparing rappers ? no, comparing concept yes ? now tell me if someone did a track with the same concept as fried chicken (from nas's new album untitled) no one would even think "oh nas did this concept already" and sorry but if a specific concept has been murdered before theres always goin to be the comparison.

Appreciate you coming by...But I just wanna say that Papoose's song was surely sick in terms of lyricism & flow. However, it had no theme, concept, idea, what so ever. If you disagree then I'd love if you mention one single thought presented in the song... it was a sick punchline, lyrical song, but with no concept...
More over, it had enormous alliteration demonstration which was certainly perfect, but the multi-syllabic rhymes were semi-absent...& we can always quote the lyrics & highlight the rhymes & discuss this further more, but of course in else section...
& there are many other differences between Pap's shit & mine. His beat was ordinary, mine was original regardless of the fucked up quality lol!. He had no hooks, I had singing hooks with smart wordplaying. his delivery was amazing, mine was awful lol!. Anyways, just wanted to clear things up.

youve listened to the track ? its called "alphabet murder" he goes through the alphabet a-z killing each word with rhymes and crazy alliteration...thats the concept, on here you go through the alphabet a-z

B for the brutal battle between you & fate

^ imma say you tried to do the same but couldnt for everline

[Speech]

comparin concepts yeah, my bad
but yo..it's something else...if you'd compare a guy's concept to another TR-rapper's concept that would be a different thing...but if a famous super rapper murders a concept, thatz not a forum-rappers businezz...lez say cassidy or vinnie paz did the alphabet concept before papoose, then you can say "oh but vinnie murdered that before"...cuz they both rappers with names...but it's just bad to say "that famous major rapper murdered it, you won't get my attention"....we are rookies god damit...peace

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

actually most things been said
sumtimes the quality was awful...a lot of cracklin
step the flow up.....was a bit shaky...but still kinda okay...but as u know it always gets better
uhmm...idk care about the comparing concepts thing...i still liked the lyrics and liked how u used some letters as words
pretty good track...fix ur quality and its a decent solid track

[mcZu]

Most things have already been said, concept was nice ( eventhough people say Papoose already used it..), lyrics were nice, beat was ok, that skit at the begin was cool. Quality, as most here already said , needs to be better.. Flow was sometimes off, but still ok, delivery was nice, that singing was..uhmm the hook was ok as in ''lyrics'', but the actually singing was bad... sorry dude... but still you kinda tried to sing, so it's cool.
Overall a nice song

[SajN]

the infection...is from Pakistan, but doesn't live there anymore

I've never lived in Pakistan... but yeah I'm from there (Was born, and still lives in Norway)...



Not a bad track.
Beat is nice, and I liked your accent.. not a bad thing.
lyrics pretty decent, but as others mentioned, the flow was off..
I liked the hook


Good track.. keep it up

[enjinn]

love the beat...concept is crazy...shows your a dope lyricist....nice track

[yoshi]

omg, 'Papoose did that'.. -.- Papoose probably pee'd yesterday too, so what?
i'm not getting it wrong btw. i liked Alphabetical Slaughter, it was sick and crazy, but had no concept. and also, if he murdered it, it doesn't mean others cannot try to do something alike, right?

no idea's original, there's nothin new under the sun
it's never what you do, but how it's done

anyway, i loved the concept and the lyrics, you had some good lines. i didn't like the flow though, it just didn't match with the beat, but you can always try improve and re-record it, so no big deal.