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Postby shadyz_babee3 » Nov 25th, '05, 23:04

you know I've been sittin here starring,
starring @ theez same 4 wallz.
The same 4 wallz dat catch me wen I fall,
when my heart just keepz tearing
this has been the place I sleep.
Its like my kingdom, Yea I own it!
The ADHD Poem:
roses are red,
violets are blue,
i have ADHD,
... hey look there is a butterfly!
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Postby Inzanity » Nov 25th, '05, 23:09

It's good but u should write more. I would like to see a whole song from u. That would be kool
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Postby AspirinE » Nov 25th, '05, 23:10

i just warned u about short rhymes




write more stuff up then post! :readguidelines:
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Postby Trigger » Nov 25th, '05, 23:11

i agree with EmptyPromises that was pretty good, add a lil more to it and it'll be the shit :smoking:
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Postby 4D » Nov 26th, '05, 02:34

C`mon Aspirine, ya don`t have to be so hard all the time man. There are poems called Haiku`s that are only 3 lines long. It`s not the quantity, it`s the quality, which was actually pretty good. Keep it up & you`ll improve everyday!
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hey guyz

Postby shadyz_babee3 » Nov 26th, '05, 03:34

thanx, thanx alot 4 da SUPPORT! :beerchug:
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roses are red,
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i have ADHD,
... hey look there is a butterfly!
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Postby AspirinE » Nov 26th, '05, 11:34

FORDIE wrote:C`mon Aspirine, ya don`t have to be so hard all the time man. There are poems called Haiku`s that are only 3 lines long. It`s not the quantity, it`s the quality, which was actually pretty good. Keep it up & you`ll improve everyday!



Fordie this is not here first such thread :boxing:
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Postby 4D » Nov 26th, '05, 14:59

ASPIRINE wrote:
FORDIE wrote:C`mon Aspirine, ya don`t have to be so hard all the time man. There are poems called Haiku`s that are only 3 lines long. It`s not the quantity, it`s the quality, which was actually pretty good. Keep it up & you`ll improve everyday!



Fordie this is not here first such thread :boxing:


See what ya mean, that "hey" thread is just spam, it should be deleted. Her other thread though "Secluded" is actually a pretty big piece,(Very good too, but, she shouldn`t be makin a new topic to ask for comments on it!
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Postby shadys_lady28 » Nov 26th, '05, 17:07

well...i love it krissy! keep it up!
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