Here's Another (My 2nd)

[Samdog2]

I think this one is better than my first but i'll let you guys decide. Feedback appreciated, thank you.

Listen closely to what im tryin to mention,
Cuz what your about to witness is divine intervention,
OK-now that I've got your fully undivided attention
Here I go again- with my two cents,
lets commence, who said rhymes could be too dense?
Thats nonsense, Just too blessed, sometimes I am rude yes,
I'm a crude mess- just a dude thats clueless,
I would guess- I'm just made to do this
but i do stress- that we've got a mission,
life aint all about cash, gats, and bitches
which is the direction that some are swaying,
but you can find me at a seminar prayin,
cuz what i'm sayin is we all need lotsa help,
sure most of you have dealt with the same things I've felt,
I'm still compelled by the strength of the views I've held,
sure I've fell, been down deep in shit,
but He pulls me out any brown heap of it,
so sleep on it- if you already haven't,
and seek a bit- and see what will happen
because in the end, life aint about rappin...

[Emadyville]

Thats nonsense, Just too blessed, sometimes I am rude yes,
I'm a crude mess- just a dude thats clueless,
I would guess- I'm just made to do this
but i do stress- that we've got a mission,
life aint all about cash, gats, and bitches

Fav part. Overall it fell a little at the end, but I'm still highly impressed.

[Steve Spag]

Pretty dope drop man.
Had some lines that I really liked, the flow was pretty sick and you actually had some multie's, which is pretty impressive for only your second rap.

Keep up the work, I can see your potential.

[Emadyville]

Yeah yo how old are you bro? Cause you have some good skill.

[Samdog2]

Yeah thanks for the feedback guys. And i'm 16.

[Emadyville]

damn keep working hard andrecord some shit

[Solace]

Dude your fucking sick. Ive been writing for months and youve already beat me Shit, work hard, write more shit, record it. Put up a myspace and upload em there. Your gunna go far if you continue with rap!

[Ka0t1c]

it's pretty good, i def see a lot of potential, there's still room for improvements which i know u will figure out down the road... Keep it up, it will get better

[Emadyville]

Yeah bro like they been saying, just keep writing, fuck with stuff, we'll give you honest feed.

[Samdog2]

Thanks for all the compliments and i'll keep writing stuff when it comes to me. But i don't know how to create beats and record yet, so idk about that.

[Solace]

Thanks for all the compliments and i'll keep writing stuff when it comes to me. But i don't know how to create beats and record yet, so idk about that.

You can record your voice with just like a computer mic, or a camera which can do video. When your a little more well known you can ask around in the Audio Stage>The Studio, if anyone could make you a beat and mix your vocals with it. Then you could just send them the recording of the voice, wait for them to do their stuff and there ya go.

[Samdog2]

Thanks for all the compliments and i'll keep writing stuff when it comes to me. But i don't know how to create beats and record yet, so idk about that.

You can record your voice with just like a computer mic, or a camera which can do video. When your a little more well known you can ask around in the Audio Stage>The Studio, if anyone could make you a beat and mix your vocals with it. Then you could just send them the recording of the voice, wait for them to do their stuff and there ya go.

All right thanks for the help man i might try that out if i can get some more verses wrote.

[Emadyville]

Thanks for all the compliments and i'll keep writing stuff when it comes to me. But i don't know how to create beats and record yet, so idk about that.

Just keep you're head into it, just think of some concepts,whether they ben done before or not, and work on it, post it, we'll give u feed

[Xray]

yeah what everyone else said, good shit

[Arabian Shady]

flow was nearly identical to em's verse on big weenie, lol
it was good for a second attempt no doubt, work on it, read much experienced members posts and learn how they write and use it to create your OWN stlye,
nice work
Peace