The rise to fame

[Emadyville]

Just wrote this. Could use some feedback please:

Rap is the drug that was dug up to fuel you,
It’s educated and maybe that’s why it can school you,
You can come from the slums and succumb to the fame,
Or overcome not be dumb and take from the game,
The knowledge that college couldn’t bring someone,
Get acknowledged when it seemed so cumbersome,
Not be a one hit wonder and hit number one,
Not get screwed by your label and pulled under, done,
But it’s harder to hit big then to get bigger hits,
Get caught in the lifestyle and let the trigger slip,
Or marry some chick, ya know that full figure bitch,
Who just wants your money, that gold digger shit,
And if you continue to fight on and keep a right mind,
Worry about keeping the lights on and always write rhymes,
Keep it true to the history that was paved for us,
Just do your verses first, get feedback, and save the chorus,
For a feature so it’s the track blasting speakers,
The one that blows up soundscan tracking meters,
The one that has you go back to high school asking teachers,
What do you think of me now? As you’re masking either,
A smile inside or the pride you just over came,
You kept composure, now everyone knows your name…

[Solace]

Damn man. That was amazing

Rap is the drug that was dug up to fuel you,
It’s educated and maybe that’s why it can school you,

For a feature so it’s the track blasting speakers,
The one that blows up soundscan tracking meters,
The one that has you go back to high school asking teachers,
What do you think of me now? As you’re masking either,

Sick man. Just sick.

[Emadyville]

Thanks a lot. I'm glad you posted cause no one else did.

[Solace]

I wonder why, that was fucking sick!

[Requiem]

holy crap, that's awesome! the way u flipped those multies, and made literal sense in lyrical tense. it's amazing

[Emadyville]

holy crap, that's awesome! the way u flipped those multies, and made literal sense in lyrical tense. it's amazing

Damn. Thank you!

[<Stiiccy>]

Rap is the drug that was dug up to fuel you,
It’s educated and maybe that’s why it can school you,
You can come from the slums and succumb to the fame,
Or overcome not be dumb and take from the game,
The knowledge that college couldn’t bring someone,
Get acknowledged when it seemed so cumbersome,
Not be a one hit wonder and hit number one,
Not get screwed by your label and pulled under, done,
But it’s harder to hit big then to get bigger hits,
Get caught in the lifestyle and let the trigger slip,

omg dude...i want to spit this shit soooooo bad lol