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Leave it in the Past

Postby Samdog2 » Sep 30th, '08, 07:26

This song is proof of the shit that goes on when neither one of you wanna admit which ones wrong,
before long you get so sick of it you wish to move on,
but then they gotta come back and slap you right in the face
right when you thought that everything in the past was erased,
so then you gotta set them right back into there place
but in this case I guess i'm the disgrace,
cuz this bitch is done shes already replaced
what else I gotta tell her, get through to her let her
know that I don't give a fuck that i'm doing better
than what I was doin when we were still together,
you keep acting like I never let it go-
now i wanna let you know, that was a long time ago
which one is wrong? you know its been you all along
i hope I can finally get across to you with this song

put in the past- put in in its place,
forget what has surpassed don't be a disgrace
leave it then fall-leave it in dismay
but I am standing tall thats how its gonna stay

now i ain't forget and forgivin
but ill forget and start living
cuz a life without you is the best one I've been given,
damn ive been driven insane, hatin what you have became
constantly livin in pain, glad I wasn't the same,
but the jist of it, is in the midst of it I went and flipped the shit
cuz to tell you the truth, I was getting pretty fuckin sick of it,
so I insisted that you leave it and change a bit,
but instead of quit you wouldn't even admit to it,
and I know what you did, im not an idiot
when we feuded do you honestly think that
honestly it was a secret
I knew It all along, cant believe you couldn't see that
lets be real, you sealed the deal
when you concealed to tell me- thought it could go unrevealed,
in my eyes I always could tell you were a slut in disguise
going with guys- thought I wouldn't realize,
must have been a suprise when I told you goodbye(bitch)

put in the past put in in its place,
forget what has surpassed don't be a disgrace
leave it then fall-leave it in dismay
but I am standing tall thats how its gonna stay

leave the past in the Past
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Re: Leave it in the Past

Postby JMG » Sep 30th, '08, 08:07

leave this song in the past... actually leave this shit in the trash
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Re: Leave it in the Past

Postby Xray » Sep 30th, '08, 09:53

not bad man, keep it up :y:
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Re: Leave it in the Past

Postby mcZu » Sep 30th, '08, 11:35

Not bad dude, not bad at all :y:
Liked the message your trying to get across, nice work :b:
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Re: Leave it in the Past

Postby Samdog2 » Sep 30th, '08, 15:12

JMG wrote:leave this song in the past... actually leave this shit in the trash

ya thanks for telling me what i did wrong so i can improve (sarcasm). i actually know what you mean i didn't really even like it myself, but i just don't like doing the serious stuff.
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Re: Leave it in the Past

Postby Emadyville » Sep 30th, '08, 16:53

I didn't think it was bad but I didn't think it was good either. The rhymes were to simple and seemed to just not fit sometimes. It just got boring as I kept reading.
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