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I'm The Shit-Untouchablez

Postby DelinQuent » Oct 15th, '08, 23:32

decided to do a lyrical song for those saying we couldnt.

http://www.zshare.net/audio/20606467843aa936/

while zshare shits the bed here's a sendspace link
http://www.sendspace.com/file/kzbsx7

Lyrics:
PikPocket-imma carbon copy utilizer
lucratively suicidal
absolutely lyrically
kamikaze unibomber
a commarady scrutinizer (saying he keeps an eye on friends)
ya suited in a box suit n tie
pull it, bullet through the muhdulahablin diiiiie
i mean muhdulinablingata
pop ya like a foster father (pop ya sounds like poppa, so it's like poppa like a foster father but pop ya as in shoot)

son u like a foster child
got the connotation
that the fakest haters vacant
they been waitin to be idolizers
gottem needin breath a lizerz
hip hop is not a liiiiive
then im pocket the revitalizer
pocketz full of dollar signs
if not then imma find me mine
i find me a phenomenon
magnificently arrogant
cockiness is confidence
betta come wit common sense
if not then yall incompitent
actually inadequate
madea see u act a bitch i (Madea was a character in Diary of a Mad Black Woman which was a woman played by a man)

beat the best im up against
beat the best im crushin them
the only best i am the best
mutha fucka you oppose?
go ahead im still the tseb even when it is oppisite
dont call me monster imma lochness
whats a goon to a goblin
bnt i am gobblein these goblins
make a hard ball turn sweet
kuz imma gobbstoppa
so stop it yall niggas nothin
sed yall not ish mutha fucka im the caca
ur in aw so i guess ur more like piss (you're in aw sounds like urinal... get it?)
what a problem i am
like arithmatic
dont eva mess wit him
(cough) damn it im sick
some one gimme medicine
some one call the doctor
fagget call me docta
kuz i stand right where i shot ya
shoot u in the neck
got you soundin like chubaca
yall call me pik im first on the roster

DelinQuent-i'm a beast on these beats, enemies scared of me/
better think carefully, or i will have yo head/
and im talkin bout yo bitch, if you talkin out yo jaw/
then im talkin thru my fists, fists talkin to ya lips/
lips talkin to the feds, feds talk a lotta shit/
but they had no evidence, evidently im the shit/
come intensly when i spit, dont tempt me i will hit/
not friendly when commenting on this state of the game/

yet my mindstate stays the same, kill my people like huessein/
maybe im insane but i dont see who's sayin/
who's sane or insane, who integrate ingrate/
in the game its a phase, its the stage of our/
last dying breath, breathe breathe/
last dying breath, and i am EMS/
yes i am me a mess, scatter brained battle trained/
battle me that'll be, catastophy i casually/
eat you up like calories, steadier than salaries/
out this world and galaxy, this is not a fallacy/
the question that you askin me, I am the answer/
2+2 is DQ, makes life simple/
silent like the mimes do, then bite you like a pitbull/
pitiful quit dog, push ya assholes im the shit/
so you dont wanna touch me, cause i can make it ugly/
ucky disgusting, ya cant eat the shit/

it'll leave you diseased, and cant fuck with the shit/
it'll give you faggots aids, so faggot i aint playin/
when im sayin what im sayin, stand up and be a man/
man up and understand, if youre comin at me/

PikPocket-if ya comin at me, you're gonna have a problem/
dq and the pocket, dont get out of pocket/
ya'll just trash and i just tossed it/
dont look in the shed i put the nails in the coffin/

Feedback is highly appreciated :y: :y: :y:
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Re: I'm The Shit-Untouchablez

Postby <VerbalTouch> » Oct 15th, '08, 23:42

your too over yourself arent you
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Re: I'm The Shit-Untouchablez

Postby DelinQuent » Oct 15th, '08, 23:49

over myself? lmfao

i dont actually think i'm the shit, i just like to say i'm the shit lmfao
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Re: I'm The Shit-Untouchablez

Postby <VerbalTouch> » Oct 15th, '08, 23:51

yup your what i make when i take poops :o
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Re: I'm The Shit-Untouchablez

Postby DelinQuent » Oct 15th, '08, 23:52

not into giving feedback?
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Re: I'm The Shit-Untouchablez

Postby <VerbalTouch> » Oct 15th, '08, 23:53

hardly am
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Re: I'm The Shit-Untouchablez

Postby Emadyville » Oct 15th, '08, 23:55

Ok. First off Pockets verse was sick, but since he's not on TR I'll basically feed you DQ.

Ok first part of your verse was straight sick. Loved the ideas in there, and the rhymes at the end were sick, no question about that.

Second Verse: This part was nasty.

last dying breath, breathe breathe/
last dying breath, and i am EMS/
yes i am me a mess, scatter brained battle trained/
battle me that'll be, catastophy i casually/


This just stood out so much:
the question that you askin me, I am the answer/
2+2 is DQ, makes life simple/


And overall you killed it. There were two parts where you the word sounded like you were catching up, but other than that, the flow was great, the emotion and delivery were on point. The whole song was great and really followed the "we're the shit" concept very well. I liked how you both started fast then slowed up, and the ending of the song with you both was a great ending to it. 10/10 man, really good work.
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Re: I'm The Shit-Untouchablez

Postby DelinQuent » Oct 16th, '08, 00:00

thanks dubs :y:

i had trouble saying catastrophe cause i kept getting tongue tied when i came to that word lmfao
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Re: I'm The Shit-Untouchablez

Postby Emadyville » Oct 16th, '08, 00:02

No problem man. Blue was pissing me off wasting posts to bullshit and not feed.
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Re: I'm The Shit-Untouchablez

Postby <VerbalTouch> » Oct 16th, '08, 00:05

you guys take this to seriously have a good laugh damn :shifty:

But DQ your old autotune shit sucked in my eyes i liked this one better plus the other guy has a good voice for this. Nicer then your older shit you use to post. :y:
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Re: I'm The Shit-Untouchablez

Postby DelinQuent » Oct 16th, '08, 00:07

i hardly used autotune lmfao

but thanks, i'll take what i can get from you :y:
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Re: I'm The Shit-Untouchablez

Postby <Stiiccy> » Oct 16th, '08, 03:10

first guy...lyrics were good..i hated his voice..flow was ill

quality was sick

you ...flow was ice cold homie...lyrics were very very creative

tho you did sound very full of yourself lol but its all good...

7/10
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Re: I'm The Shit-Untouchablez

Postby DelinQuent » Oct 16th, '08, 03:23

thanks for the feed sticcy glad you enjoyed it. the point was to sound full of myself lmfao thanks for noticing.
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Re: I'm The Shit-Untouchablez

Postby KDEWolf » Oct 16th, '08, 03:52

wheres the multis? wheres the metaphors? alotta big words but didnt make you lyrical lol. Also your not gonna get on the radio for sounding like the next man. Best way to get on the radio is to make some shit that nobody else is doing that is also catchy. To me Radio = Catchy.....

the songs was coo. i like the first dude the best. Flow was on point went crazy at points but it was good overall. Never went off or anything....

Second dude was alright he wasnt saying nothing really.... he lyrics where basic.

But ya over all it was an interesting song... 7/10
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Re: I'm The Shit-Untouchablez

Postby <Stiiccy> » Oct 16th, '08, 04:01

Best way to get on the radio is to make some shit that nobody else is doing that is also catchy


lol sure thing man...Weezy is different?, Fat joe is different?, Plies is different?, Kayne is different?, T.I. is different?...all of those guys are not different bud...

you get on the radio by sucking dick metaphorically basically :whistle:
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