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Epiphany - Time For War Freestyle

Postby Solace » Oct 23rd, '08, 21:57

Freestyled something. I stumbled somewhere on it, youll notice since i go blank for a second then try to speed up back onto the flow.

http://www.zshare.net/audio/5029198118ef683a/


BETTER QUALITY VERSION:
http://www.zshare.net/audio/503519846c14f7b2/

Peace :flower:
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Re: Epiphany - Time For War Freestyle

Postby Kez » Oct 23rd, '08, 22:49

First of all, why does the beat sound like it's being played from a CD player?
Second you sound bored and too quiet
Lyrics are just you bragging which can work for a freestyle but meh
Flow aint really that great, it's on a few times but otherwise not much for it
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Re: Epiphany - Time For War Freestyle

Postby Solace » Oct 23rd, '08, 22:53

it sounded like that cause i was playing the instrumental from my computer while recording with a camera. And yeah i have bad delivery. Thanks for checking.
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Re: Epiphany - Time For War Freestyle

Postby Robbie G » Oct 24th, '08, 00:32

damn...that's a pretty ghetto way to make a song. :unsure:

I agree with Kez. A few times I thought you flowed well but it was off for the most. I love that beat, wasn't it from a raf remix? And yeah get more into out, put emotion because it sounds like your bored when your rapping. Not saying it's that easy, but that's a big step. :y:
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Re: Epiphany - Time For War Freestyle

Postby Solace » Oct 24th, '08, 00:36

Shady Babie wrote:damn...that's a pretty ghetto way to make a song. :unsure:

:laughing: i have no mic sooo..At least im trying :D

Its an actual beat but im not sure who made it and what song its really for, but its called Time For War.

I guess your right, adding emotion would be a pretty big step but its like...How do i? If im angry i could yell, but in a song like this its just liek How the fuck do i add emotion to that line, or that line? etc.

Thanks for checking it man :y:
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Re: Epiphany - Time For War Freestyle

Postby Tash8 » Oct 24th, '08, 02:32

worse than your other song, no need to feed. just go look at all the feed from previous topic.
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Re: Epiphany - Time For War Freestyle

Postby Solace » Oct 24th, '08, 02:34

Thanks for feedback.

Whats worse, lyrics, delivery, or just the quality? I want to know.

EDIT: and please dont say "All of them" cause i want to know which to firstly try to improve on so the next track i do itll be better. And obviously its worse than the other, this was freestyled, other was written, and this had the beat in the background.
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Re: Epiphany - Time For War Freestyle

Postby Tash8 » Oct 24th, '08, 03:11

shadymademe wrote:Thanks for feedback.

Whats worse, lyrics, delivery, or just the quality? I want to know.

EDIT: and please dont say "All of them" cause i want to know which to firstly try to improve on so the next track i do itll be better. And obviously its worse than the other, this was freestyled, other was written, and this had the beat in the background.


umm all of them, lyrics blew, delivery was worse, quality is obviously horrible...

too harsh for you? too bad...
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Re: Epiphany - Time For War Freestyle

Postby Solace » Oct 24th, '08, 03:14

Well i cant improve on them all instantly, thats kinda why i said dont say All of them, even though you did. I wanna do it one by one and i want to know which would bring my tracks up higher if i improve on them first.
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Re: Epiphany - Time For War Freestyle

Postby Tash8 » Oct 24th, '08, 04:30

shadymademe wrote:Well i cant improve on them all instantly, thats kinda why i said dont say All of them, even though you did. I wanna do it one by one and i want to know which would bring my tracks up higher if i improve on them first.


u can't improve instantly, but you do improve, what's the point of posting a track that shows regression rather than progression?

answer please.
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Re: Epiphany - Time For War Freestyle

Postby Solace » Oct 24th, '08, 05:14

@Chet, thanks, and ill try that
@Tash8, im just wondering are you trying to annoy me or something? you cant just answer a question? Come on i just wanna know which would show a larger step forward if i attempted at improving those mostly?
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Re: Epiphany - Time For War Freestyle

Postby Tash8 » Oct 24th, '08, 05:19

shadymademe wrote:@Chet, thanks, and ill try that
@Tash8, im just wondering are you trying to annoy me or something? you cant just answer a question? Come on i just wanna know which would show a larger step forward if i attempted at improving those mostly?


where did you ask me a question, and no i'm trying to annoy you, you posted here for feedback, i'm giving it...

just no point in posting stuff, that's worse than your previous attempt, because it'll just be repeating what i said earlier..
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Re: Epiphany - Time For War Freestyle

Postby Solace » Oct 24th, '08, 05:25

Yes, we've established that and that is why i was asking a question which you arent answering.

I asked which should i improve on FIRST and you said all of them, but i meant the most important one that will lead me to be better on other tracks. Delivery, Lyrics or quality. That was my question.

And ill wait longer till i post another thing here, ill try to fix the stuff you told me before.
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Re: Epiphany - Time For War Freestyle

Postby Tash8 » Oct 24th, '08, 05:32

shadymademe wrote:Yes, we've established that and that is why i was asking a question which you arent answering.

I asked which should i improve on FIRST and you said all of them, but i meant the most important one that will lead me to be better on other tracks. Delivery, Lyrics or quality. That was my question.

And ill wait longer till i post another thing here, ill try to fix the stuff you told me before.


oh, i guess i didn't understand,, well quality is the least important BUT it is more important than you may think, mic quality helps a lot with delivery, for example you might be screaming and the mic just doesn't pick it up right... so yea, i say work on flow first because without flow you can have the best lyrics and best delivery and the song will sound horrible.. then after flow i say work on delivery and quality both at the same time, THEN lyrics.
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Re: Epiphany - Time For War Freestyle

Postby Solace » Oct 24th, '08, 05:35

Okay thanks man, that was what i was asking :y: So flow first, delivery/quality 2nd and lastly lyrics. Next thing i post here will hopefully top this one and the last one. Thanks for helping.
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