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Verse from an LP

Postby Xray » Nov 8th, '08, 11:30

Verse:
I'm like a bad chef, burning your favorite dish//
cooking these tracks as if, Hells Kitchen's on the disc//
Without a feature, defeat ya, it's the Iron Fist//
words move like, Mr. Meyagi's in the mist//
Spitting like i just uh, ghost wrote for Hitler//
Jews getting scared, I'm fucking witchya//
With corny lines, Sajjad is showing no signs//
like these broke ass emcees in the streets, holding signs//
"Will suck for food", your getting reckless with your vinyls//
wack loops and riddles, like a Kanye instrumental//
One hit wonders, laying down unconscious//
I got a, hell of a soul, so I'm evil with the concepts//
Prodigy influenced, I'm your motherfucken nemesis//
sick with the beats, like the infamous Havoc is//
Without a keyboard, got this epic shit produced//
It's the return of the Blitz, so you know your in pursuit//

Without a feature, defeat ya, it's the Iron Fist//
words move like, Mr. Meyagi's in the mist//

What i meant is, words are invisible so therefore I'll karate your ass in the mist. The rest you should be able to get the punchlines or lines. Anyways let me know what you think.
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Re: Verse from an LP

Postby Xray » Nov 8th, '08, 15:14

41 views and not one post? :shock:
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Re: Verse from an LP

Postby Solace » Nov 8th, '08, 15:25

Sick as fuck!

Instantly the first 2 lines gripped me in man. That was dope. Nice punch at Kanye lol, i was just like laughing when i read that. Fucking great punches, hitler one was nice too. This NEEDS more reviews.
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Re: Verse from an LP

Postby Jay-19 » Nov 8th, '08, 15:36

Some sick lines bro!
Really good!
Some punchlines made me laugh and were very creative and witty.
That Hitler-line was sick man for real!

But my favorite line is this:

"Will suck for food", your getting reckless with your vinyls//
wack loops and riddles, like a Kanye instrumental//



Good work bro! :y:
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Re: Verse from an LP

Postby Nu Syd » Nov 8th, '08, 15:53

damn crazy read man, lota stands outs :b:
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Re: Verse from an LP

Postby Xray » Nov 8th, '08, 15:59

thank you all, glad you guys found some of it was funny. :worship:
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Re: Verse from an LP

Postby Rain Matrix » Nov 8th, '08, 16:48

this was a really good drop, flow wise and as far as rhymes go
however there is nothing cool about hitler, or his holacaust for that matter
thumbs down for that :n: , thumbs up for tha rest :y:
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Re: Verse from an LP

Postby Xray » Nov 8th, '08, 16:51

Rain Matrix wrote:this was a really good drop, flow wise and as far as rhymes go
however there is nothing cool about hitler, or his holacaust for that matter
thumbs down for that :n: , thumbs up for tha rest :y:

Glad you liked everything but the Hitler line. Didn't wanna sound like a racist i was just using it as a punch type shit. Thanks for checking. :y:
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Re: Verse from an LP

Postby mcZu » Nov 8th, '08, 18:25

Sick lines dawg, some genius punches there :y:
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Re: Verse from an LP

Postby Robbie G » Nov 9th, '08, 00:54

Good stuff, no complaints. Can't wait for the lp. :y:
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Re: Verse from an LP

Postby Xray » Nov 9th, '08, 06:15

^^^Cool, thanks to both of you.
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Re: Verse from an LP

Postby Tash8 » Nov 9th, '08, 06:23

Xray wrote:like these broke ass emcees in the streets, holding signs//
"Will suck for food", your getting reckless with your vinyls//
wack loops and riddles, like a Kanye instrumental//


hahaha at the kanye line

dope drop man!
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Re: Verse from an LP

Postby Arabian Shady » Nov 9th, '08, 06:49

C4 blows up-YET AGAIN!!!! :worship:
that was sick man, reali reali dope :smoking:
punches were well placed, timing was perfect and none of them seemed forced,it was like a concept freestlye, sick shit :b:
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Re: Verse from an LP

Postby Xray » Nov 9th, '08, 07:08

^^Thank you, thank you, your far to kind. (beat kicks in)
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