z_em wrote:man u did take your time to come up wit a good piece of writing ,, they did mention some staff about your chorus before ,, but looking at it know .. it looks hot and cool for me .. so i like it though ,, talking about the verses ,, i liked the 1st more rather than the 2nd ,, the 1st is sick in term of flow and rhymes ,, but the 2nd was off in some areas ,, n u were repeating words like ( loose twice ) ( shit three times at the end of each sentence ) i don’t know but if u pick other words that could rhymed with them is better than repeating them .. so gd post man ,, overall 8/10
Thanks man, couldnt ask for anything better. The reason i rhymed "shit" 3 times is cause 1 of them is i rhyme it like in an accent so it fits well. Im glad you liked it, it takes me about 20-30 minutes to write my pieces, so i guess that would be a good amount for you too.
Lol @ Kez. Isnt that pic from the zelda cartoon er something
