NEW - Run My Mouth

[Solace]

Rawrbleh

[Verse 1]
People dont like me but i dont even blame em,
In fact I go right to them and tell them to keep hating,
People dont understand me, people cant apprehend me,
But I take it like a joke as if they were my family,
Tick tock the clock keeps ticking,
Hoes is just fucking and moms is just bitching,
Why did I choose to go down this path,
Waving my middle finger screaming "KISS MY ASS",
Well I guess its music thats influenced me,
To not smoke marijuana, instead just chew the weed,
Its amazing, how much Ive been talking,
Talking shit, gibberish, and then i keep walking,
Laughing it up, cause to me life is a joke,
So i tell as many as I can but with multies, similes & metaphors.

[Chorus x2]
Some people cant take it, its too big of a dose,
Getting chills down their spines like my lines were ghosts,
But it dont matter, I like when people hate me,
It just motivates me to take pleasure and start embracing.

[Verse 2]
The good die young, guess ima die an old man,
Rap is like poker, everyone except me is folding',
Im still a kid but my mind has matured,
Thinking like a 20 year old lunatic, saneness is cured,
People acting hard as if they were some serial killer,
Probably couldnt kill a beat with my material gone iller,
This part of the song is for my rant, so get ready,
Side effects: Ears might blow like confetti,
So fuck you, fuck your school, fuck your parents,
Self centered in the center of rap, I aint tryin to hear it,
Dont like me? Then just dont pretend respectin',
Rather you admit it than hiding it like a kid in my basement,
You judging like you know me, but you dont know shit,
The only time you come close to me is when your blowing, bitch.

[Chorus x2]

[Verse 3]
I aint good for children, they shouldnt ever hear me,
And if they dont like me id rather they fear me,
I'm a perfect role model for little children in grade 2,
I make them smoke weed at 9, and make them hate school,
Yeah 'It's Just Epiphany', dont like it, dont listen to me,
Id rather you ignore than have some bitching beef,
So now im gunna have to call out some names,
Hopefully saying them wont give 'em any fame,
Benzino, Soulja Boy and Lil Wayne,
a quick list of shitty rappers that rack my brain,
how the fuck could Crank Dat and Lolipop become hits?
Obviously a mass proportion of Earth enjoys shit!

[Chorus x2]


Note: Verse 3 uses some lines from another piece 'It's Just Epiphany' which isnt gunna be recorded, and it was pretty bad, but this is going to be recorded (eventually...) and i took the best lines.

[Requiem]

all i have to do is look up in the top right corner of the TR home page, and see (undone) in the forum title to kno its u

I have to say this is the BEST flowing verse u've ever written, because every line has a distinct flow and go right into each other. the rhyming's good, the last two lines i'd rework. the chorus was aight, the last 2 were best in it.
this is one of those songs like Em's while he was underground, or Raekwon. cuz it's just straight rhyming. something u can just bump to. nothing groundbreaking. sort of like that Mobb Deep song Survival of the Fittest, or Shook Ones. u know what i mean. it's just straight rhyming, u talking about ur life, and people's picture of u, and ur take on everything. it's a great start to a peice.
i really think u should make this a 3 verser. cuz this is an awesome "bump" track. u know?
i so wanna make a beat for this, something like Shook Ones. lmao, i've rambled enough. Great drop. i'm going to go eat now. i'll be on msn at like 8:30.

[Solace]

all i have to do is look up in the top right corner of the TR home page, and see (undone) in the forum title to kno its u

I have to say this is the BEST flowing verse u've ever written, because every line has a distinct flow and go right into each other. the rhyming's good, the last two lines i'd rework. the chorus was aight, the last 2 were best in it.
this is one of those songs like Em's while he was underground, or Raekwon. cuz it's just straight rhyming. something u can just bump to. nothing groundbreaking. sort of like that Mobb Deep song Survival of the Fittest, or Shook Ones. u know what i mean. it's just straight rhyming, u talking about ur life, and people's picture of u, and ur take on everything. it's a great start to a peice.
i really think u should make this a 3 verser. cuz this is an awesome "bump" track. u know?
i so wanna make a beat for this, something like Shook Ones. lmao, i've rambled enough. Great drop. i'm going to go eat now. i'll be on msn at like 8:30.

Thanks man, and if you think i should do 3 verses...Well i will. Ive only done a 3 verser once i think. And im glad you like it, i do wanna finish it asap. Ill be on 8 30 then too unless Eminem magically appears on the TRL Finale Anyways, thanks for your comment and thats pretty much it.

*Goes to do 2nd verse*

[Requiem]

oooh, the TRL finale. what time does it come on??? wow, off subject.
um, great drop, there on subject

[Solace]

oooh, the TRL finale. what time does it come on??? wow, off subject.
um, great drop, there on subject

Comes on at 8, i think. Check the TRL Finale topic in the Eminem section. Anyways, finished verse 2 and edited the chorus.

[Requiem]

Chorus- way better.

Verse 2, started great

Hearing people talking like they killing people,
Bitches couldnt kill a fly, unlike Nas killin' Ether,
Girls? Dont care about them, you could beat her,
Hit them for no reason, and lie about them being a cheater,

didn't like that, how bout...
i'm hearin people talkin out of nowhere,
sh*t like Nas's Ether blarin in my ear,
tellin me to go around a corner, and beat a girl to death.
or to jump off of a bridge, and hold my breath...


also, i think u meant "disrespected" in that line close to the bottom.

^good job tho, i feel lonely posting

[Solace]

Chorus- way better.

Verse 2, started great

Hearing people talking like they killing people,
Bitches couldnt kill a fly, unlike Nas killin' Ether,
Girls? Dont care about them, you could beat her,
Hit them for no reason, and lie about them being a cheater,

didn't like that, how bout...
i'm hearin people talkin out of nowhere,
sh*t like Nas's Ether blarin in my ear,
tellin me to go around a corner, and beat a girl to death.
or to jump off of a bridge, and hold my breath...


also, i think u meant "disrespected" in that line close to the bottom.

^good job tho, i feel lonely posting

Glad its better (the chorus) but i was also considering redoing that part. But i wouldnt use your first to lines ("nowhere" & "my ear" dont rhyme. its weird but i wouldnt put it together like that) but i like those 2 last lines. thanks for them ill do part of 3rd verse eventually tonight too.

[Requiem]

^i like it better now, has a more "dark" feel than verse 1. but it's still sick, and works great for a verse 2. can't wait for verse 3. going to be a sick track

[Solace]

^i like it better now, has a more "dark" feel than verse 1. but it's still sick, and works great for a verse 2. can't wait for verse 3. going to be a sick track

Thanks, i just fixed the flow too after you posted so check that. If flow seems off to you well it flows fine to me, im flowing it to Mister KA's beat "Cannibal". Also, i re-did some lines. Felt like they didnt work. And yea, this piece is gunna be pretty good

[MC Anonymous]

Good verse dude, although I've seen better from you.
Pretty solid stuff you got here, I would tweak the vocab a little bit, and maybe tighten it up just a pinch more.

[Solace]

Good verse dude, although I've seen better from you.
Pretty solid stuff you got here, I would tweak the vocab a little bit, and maybe tighten it up just a pinch more.

Thanks man, im gunna revise 1st+2nd verse when i do the 3rd (3rd is gunna show more lyricism than the 1st and 2nd verse). Hopefully the finished product will be able to impress you

[MC Anonymous]

Good verse dude, although I've seen better from you.
Pretty solid stuff you got here, I would tweak the vocab a little bit, and maybe tighten it up just a pinch more.

Thanks man, im gunna revise 1st+2nd verse when i do the 3rd (3rd is gunna show more lyricism than the 1st and 2nd verse). Hopefully the finished product will be able to impress you

Do you have AIM? cause' I need more people to communicate with lol. I might be able to help ya out to over it.

[Requiem]

Good verse dude, although I've seen better from you.
Pretty solid stuff you got here, I would tweak the vocab a little bit, and maybe tighten it up just a pinch more.

Thanks man, im gunna revise 1st+2nd verse when i do the 3rd (3rd is gunna show more lyricism than the 1st and 2nd verse). Hopefully the finished product will be able to impress you

Do you have AIM? cause' I need more people to communicate with lol. I might be able to help ya out to over it.

if u got msn mess anonymous, pm me

[Solace]

Good verse dude, although I've seen better from you.
Pretty solid stuff you got here, I would tweak the vocab a little bit, and maybe tighten it up just a pinch more.

Thanks man, im gunna revise 1st+2nd verse when i do the 3rd (3rd is gunna show more lyricism than the 1st and 2nd verse). Hopefully the finished product will be able to impress you

Do you have AIM? cause' I need more people to communicate with lol. I might be able to help ya out to over it.

i dont got AIM but i got an MSN. Hopefully you got one

[Slim Zaddy]

You judging like you know me, but you dont know shit,
The only time you come close to me is when your blowing, bitch

i liked this line , cuz i feel like there's a lot of emotions going on , so talking about the first verse it's sick man in terms of rhymes metaphors 2 flow was good but what's hold my attention is how u expressed what are u feeling on that verse it's amazing .. Second verse is the one that i liked it more.. i don’t know i always prefer your 2nd verses i found them more creative . so it was dope man keep writing .. nd nice ( run my mouth ) from ya ..