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This Soldier's Still Marchin'

Postby Ka0t1c » Nov 30th, '08, 21:51

it's tough for me to make a choice at what i wanna be
cuz i oughta just raise my voice enough with running

free me from this nonsense cuz constantly all that i see's
brought a lot of numbness, the reason's become this altering

am i now a monster, i'm not exhausted but suffering must halt or
the results are, i promise things going down farther to the bottom

pardon me, but these problems were started and no longer i'm offering
my heart cuz the hardships helped pull us apart stronger, stop following

this soldier's still marchin for my importance in art cuz my story longs to breathe
and transform me out the Halloween portrait: a dark portal which scarred my lead...
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: This Soldier's Still Marchin'

Postby MC Anonymous » Nov 30th, '08, 22:01

Kaotic wrote:it's tough for me to make a choice at what i wanna be
cuz i oughta just raise my voice enough with running

free me from this nonsense cuz constantly all that i see's
brought a lot of numbness, the reason's become this altering

am i now a monster, i'm not exhausted but suffering must halt or
the results are, i promise things going down farther to the bottom

pardon me, but these problems were started and no longer i'm offering
my heart cuz the hardships helped pull us apart stronger, stop following

this soldier's still marchin for my importance in art cuz my story longs to breathe
and transform me out the Halloween portrait: a dark portal which scarred my lead...


I enjoyed the couplets! Good job bro!
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: This Soldier's Still Marchin'

Postby Solace » Nov 30th, '08, 23:12

Nice stuff man, keep it up :y: Werent any lines i liked specifically, it was consistent :y:
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Re: This Soldier's Still Marchin'

Postby Ka0t1c » Nov 30th, '08, 23:14

thanx, i didn't realise these were called couplets, lol, glad u knew and mentioned it! :8)
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: This Soldier's Still Marchin'

Postby Ka0t1c » Nov 30th, '08, 23:16

thanx shadymademe for ur feed :y: :y:
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