Nerve Wreck

[Ka0t1c]

im hurtin so much to let my words be observed by the world
and im goin berserk from it, i have swerved, that im sure
but im comin to turn up the inferno which burns in my stomache
i'm not runnin in circles, my purpose aint just for nothin
im tough and mature, plus somethin must get done
i won't have discourage crush what is fun
it's urgent: number one, to emerge under the sun
because im on the verge with a hunger like no other
i can't adjourn things beyond, this term i'll respond
to exterminate the germs i determine evolve into monsters
and i don't have months cuz surely i'm not growin younger
so earlier, i'm alert, i'm unsturdy; uncalm
it's occured and disturbing, you think i'm wrong?

[Urban Punk]

I liked it! I think the concept was great more like a poets type concept thought all the same it was tight… the only thing I will say is I feel it needs a little more on the rhyming side of thing’s thought everything else worked well

[James R.]

Nice shit man. I'm feelin this poetic side of you, it really suits you. I dunno if it was better than the last thing you dropped, but you've definitely brought yourself to another level. Keep up the great work man.

[Ka0t1c]

thanx for your feed, i will consider these things for my next piece(s)