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A Melancholic Melody.

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A Melancholic Melody.

Postby MC Anonymous » Nov 27th, '08, 15:59

My life is my sentence as I write it despite the violence
every letters blends from the pen to the sharpened silence
I'm shaking as the tears pound, from the eyes, to the ground
the flow glides along the floor without making a sound
I walk, every footstep burns as the last
all these twists and turns from the past
the sorrowful melodies simulates the optical stimuli
as I wallow without end, and with a grin I cry
for I know, before the merciless show ends
Lucifer and God must first become friends
fate bends as every sand of the hour glass falls
and my heart is liquid metal surrounded by glass walls
cursive writing continues as the sentence becomes a paragraph
surfaced doubt appeals to Satan is he sits there and laughs
the wrath of deep depression can not be escaped
however you respond to it, it will determine your fate.
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: A Melancholic Melody.

Postby Ka0t1c » Nov 27th, '08, 17:29

yeah, that was good!
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: A Melancholic Melody.

Postby lilrossy » Nov 27th, '08, 19:00

Shit hot man, had a really good flow. good work :y:
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Re: A Melancholic Melody.

Postby mcZu » Nov 27th, '08, 22:03

Great piece man!
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Re: A Melancholic Melody.

Postby James R. » Nov 28th, '08, 04:42

Nice drop. Good flow, vocab, structure, concepts, multies. Overall hot piece man. Keep it up.
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Re: A Melancholic Melody.

Postby Solace » Dec 4th, '08, 02:58

Dude...What they said^ =D
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Re: A Melancholic Melody.

Postby mista slimy » Dec 4th, '08, 11:40

u hava gift fo rhymes :) keep it up bro :y:
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