Pardon My Interruption

[Ka0t1c]

pardon my interruption but i'm beginnin my start of my big introduction
i entered with caution this realm of corruption and then i considered the options
i remember how often i lived in the dark and that helped me configure my art
and more specific my functions, my mission's to part my gen'ral assumptions
so i'm givin my heart towards buildin with positive construction from my lyric's remarks
cuz i won't sit in my dungeon, my spirit now harks: it listens, not stubborn
cuz i wanna be hittin the mark, my gift they can't govern -
until i depart my skillful production i'm fixed to embark on
but my will may get hard because there's no real instructions
yet i'm still here to guard like a shield the pungent field unbarred

[Slim Zaddy]

the concept is good . i liked it , ,but structure is missed up man ,, fix it and it will sound nice .. Keep it up

[Ka0t1c]

i did that on purpose cuz i didnt think most people would recognize where i break and where it rhymes but if i hear enough ppl tell me to change it, i will... thanx for ur feedback

[Slim Zaddy]

i did that on purpose cuz i didnt think most people would recognize where i break and where it rhymes but if i hear enough ppl tell me to change it, i will... thanx for ur feedback

aha it's okay then ,, you're more than welcomed , nd now it looks good ..

[mcZu]

Liked it, enjoyed reading it. It flowed pretty good.
I don't think the structure is messed up, 'cause you probably had an idea of how this should be flowed
Nice piece man