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Hell 4 A Home

Postby Ka0t1c » Dec 13th, '08, 19:31

let me tell you about my hell of a route which i followed
without any doubt i would settle for a better tomorrow

well, my father was shallow while my mother kept mellow
on a dead-end mounted my house in the part of the ghetto

where my uncle slept on our couch and always went mental
was my father especially when we all were loud playin Nintendo

yeah, we stayed gettin in trouble, at the age of seven
i would evade the big kennel cause i hated that devil

i couldn't wait to escape him so i'd fade in the shadows
cause it wasn't too late to create the greatest of battles

so i looked to be safe from this Satan cause that'll
put him in a chamber like a crook has their shackles

no book had an answer but it only took me mere seconds
to hook a new chapter and get put back into good hands- it's

my future called "Heaven", i stood up and planted
my foot for this canvas, everyone understand it

if you knew of my family, from them i abandoned
but then again, i grew to a man pursuing a plan to

do in this planet what few can and land it

i know it's 19 lines but when i rap it, it completes a verse, the way i wrote it is different than how i rap it, i wrote it this way so u can see the rhymes and see how the bars look, otherwise the rhyme pattern might throw you off with how this scheme works.
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Re: Hell 4 A Home (Incomplete)

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 13th, '08, 19:33

Kaotic wrote:let me tell you about my hell of a route which i followed
without any doubt i would settle for a better tomorrow

well, my father was shallow while my mother kept mellow
on a dead-end mounted my house in the part of the ghetto

where my uncle slept on our couch and always went mental
was my father especially when we all were loud playin Nintendo

yeah, we stayed gettin in trouble, at the age of seven
i would evade the big kennel cause i hated that devil

So far this is pretty good, I will give official feed when it is done though.
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Re: Hell 4 A Home (Incomplete)

Postby Emadyville » Dec 13th, '08, 19:36

I liked, finish!
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Re: Hell 4 A Home (Incomplete)

Postby neversnooze » Dec 13th, '08, 20:39

you got a cool ass family and nice warm trip. i want to see where this is going, finish it and good WRITE!1!
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Re: Hell 4 A Home (Incomplete)

Postby Dark Blue » Dec 13th, '08, 21:14

yea this is goin pretty good :y: i wanna read more lol
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Re: Hell 4 A Home

Postby Solace » Dec 13th, '08, 21:57

Those 19 lines were nice man :y:
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Re: Hell 4 A Home

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 13th, '08, 22:12

You're a very good story teller. 8/10
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Re: Hell 4 A Home

Postby Ka0t1c » Dec 13th, '08, 22:21

MC Anonymous wrote:You're a very good story teller. 8/10
alright, looks like i need to step it up then :y: :y:
shadymademe wrote:Those 19 lines were nice man :y:
thanx!
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