Red Corpses [Lil Wayne Diss] *done

[tjb]

Chorus:

red corpses, red corpses wayne shoulda worn kev outside ya fortress
red corpses, red corpses used the guns on Wayne outside the fortress
red corpses red corpses shot Wayne right dead outside the fortress [you out the house]




ya ya yea im a rookie in tha game, but im comin up fast,
and im sure to spark a flame an your sure to come in last,
yea call me arsonist, cuz i burn this wayne track to the ground,
yea to ashes, i smash this, like a highway accident, a crash.
like think of busted stuff, think of u busted up now, whats up
yea the sky, an u know ima fly, like a bird, like a plane, wait hell no superman,
and im piercing like a deagle, an when u hear one of my rhymes u gets like old like feeble but call me mr. seagull cuz i can spot the latest trash, an impeach em, so fast, its not legal
like and illegal, like a Mexican, like, who u messin wit?
Me! thats who, this is a lil wayne diss, now lil wayne u cant tell TJB shit.

[Chorus]


Tht was only the 1st verse, I got quite a bit of energy ima bout to burst.
Now put off, like as much as jeezy puts on, an kanyeezy will
Help you out wit another love song,
an watd u for thankgivin? No turkey 4, u but I bet u ate a bird an I bet he loved it to
but I bet he flew the coup, 100% truth, spittin from these lips,
but I only gotta pair wayne, an there way above my hips, haha
u say no Ni^gga got swagga like urs, but ima die laughin atcha,
cuz hoo the fuck cares?
ha id wish u try harder, cuz if I ever make it big,
ill wear the crown proud, like you thought u did
call ur songs a auction, an ill take the cheapest bid,
cuz I don’t pay CASH MONEY for cheap ass shit

[Chorus]





Ha I just bombed ya, like Nagasaki [kaboom!]
An If I had my gloves, I could hook ya like rocky [round 2!]
Like gab, gab, gab, ur all talk, talk, talk,
but these rhymes are like a dagg…er, if you can’t walk the walk its gonna kill ur swagger
so lets take it in steps, lets look to the past, to the future, a cast for ur broken raps like
1 carta,
2 carta,
3 carta,
4 how many cartas till waynes out the door ,
Ur lookin at his replacement, I was chasing it, I beat his high score,
So call me new hope, not attack of the clone wars.

Red corpses, red corpses, wayne shoulda worn kev outside the fortress
Red corpses, Red corpses, used the guns on wayne outside the fortress
Red corpses, Red corpses, shot wayne right dead outside the fortress

[soperman005]

damnnn..

that was garbage

[tjb]

a yo ucant judge on just tht wait till i get it recorded it will piece together like ..... a puzzle

[soperman005]

lyrics are terrible. dont waste time recording it.

[tjb]

ima waste it

[soperman005]

why waste your time recording a shitty ass diss song that Lil' Wayne wont even hear

[tjb]

yo whats ur prob asshole hoo says tha kid wont here it

[soperman005]

because even if he magically stumbled upon it, he wouldnt listen past the first line..

why dont you spend time writing lyrics instead of that gargbage

use your brain if you have one

[tjb]

ha ur cool i wanna see u write something an u cant say all tht song was shitty sure a few lines were weak but write something were hearin get bak to me

[soperman005]

ite man

[Solace]

ya ya yea im a rookie in tha game, but im comin up fast,
and im sure to spark a flame an your sure to come in last,

No offense man, these were the only decent lines in this. I couldnt figure out the flow at all, the structure was just messed up. Hook was horrible too. I'm not trying to be mean tho. And you needed multies there too. Keep at it

[Ka0t1c]

poorly written

[tjb]

ya ya yea im a rookie in tha game, but im comin up fast,
and im sure to spark a flame an your sure to come in last,

No offense man, these were the only decent lines in this. I couldnt figure out the flow at all, the structure was just messed up. Hook was horrible too. I'm not trying to be mean tho. And you needed multies there too. Keep at it

aight ill stay at it

[James R.]

Whack as hell. Shadymademe summed it up. But I wouldn't waste time recording it. Keep practicing.