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"Love Will II" NEW EMADYVILLE

Postby Emadyville » Jan 1st, '09, 19:23

This is the sequel to "Love Will" obviously, so if you haven't heard that it's on my myspace you should prolly listen to that first because these were written from real life shit with a girl and it's kinda a story.

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Break what fall I’ve already fell hard,
Laid in hells arms bloody knuckles and twelve scars,
Held bars on each beat a jailed convict,
Nailed nonsense down with a failed conscious,
And exhaled comments to get laughed at,
A pack rat in the lab wrapped with facts of being back stabbed,
By nothing diabolical to me it’s illogical,
Impossible to face obstacles so now I became the prodigal,
Running from the hands of evil never back for a sequel,
Because the facts show decietful, sad, and feeble,
Say i'm insane or mad just not peaceful my slates-full,
This hate-pulled me to this hateful place,
From the look of an unfaithful, ungrateful face,
It's not debatable I'm chased to this dungeon,
Running empty you tempt me so I’m coming,
You wanted an asshole this songs just begun….

You said you were a bitch and to call you a bitch,
And I didn’t let myself I just let it slide,
I denied it now I can’t because it’s implied,
After the ride of my life I took it all in stride,
I felt alive then I died insides turned outside,
I’ve been burned outright but goodnight turn out lights,
The flame is gone I’m beyond being wronged,
I’ll let bygones be bygones, so long be bye-gone,
Leave the lies behind everything you saids wrong,
I’m too headstrong to let myself be lead on,
I was stepped on but now I am so goddamn awake,
I awoke so pissed off there’s no stopping I take,
All of the shit you threw my way just to give-it,
A little twist of my own and I am not timid,
I’m straight going off right now without limits,
The table has turned because I’m the one whose livid…

When we meet again I’ll be off my feet again,
Not falling for you finding a bridge to leap and then,
I’ll be done forever, we will never be together,
I didn’t know better and every girl I knows better,
And I’m a go getter, the dirts off my shoulders,
I wiped myself clean of this cause I’m a soldier,
I never took it too far and I’ve kept composure,
I don’t care about exposure when it gave me my closure,
That you never did, never answered my questions,
I guess it’s switched now and I’ve transferred a lesson,
That I learned in time but I just have to fast forward,
To now where you’re pissed when you had asked for-it,
Remember those words to me that you expressed,
When you heard love will and you were so impressed,
Said you wish that you could piss me off more often,
Cause I write great songs, you built your own coffin...

Feedback is appreciated thanks :y:
Last edited by Emadyville on Jan 2nd, '09, 01:00, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: "Love Will II" NEW EMADYVILLE

Postby mcZu » Jan 1st, '09, 19:42

Love the beat, it has a cathcy feeling to it. Lyrics are great, full of emotion and shit, nice job on the lyrics. Your flow and delivery are good, you're flow is almost perfect. The delivery gives the proper feeling to the lyrics. Emotion was there.
Overall I liked the track man, enjoyed the first part and the second part is just as good or even better.
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Re: "Love Will II" NEW EMADYVILLE

Postby Emadyville » Jan 1st, '09, 19:48

Damn thanks a lot for being thorough with your feed it really helps. Glad you liked it :y:
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Re: "Love Will II" NEW EMADYVILLE

Postby Emadyville » Jan 2nd, '09, 01:01

Scott Macdougall wrote:pleeeeease put the lyrics up. :'(


They're up now :y:
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Re: "Love Will II" NEW EMADYVILLE

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 2nd, '09, 20:07

it's good man ,, the beat was catchy it sounds goood .. lyrics were to the point and clear nd they were great , but honestly I didn’t feel the lyrics I mean emotionally like your first love will but they are decent anyway I’m jus comparing them to the previous love will . your delivery was perfect as always nothin to critic on that .. i guess it was a pretty dope song .. overall 8.5/10 .. keeep it up man :y: :y:
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Re: "Love Will II" NEW EMADYVILLE

Postby Emadyville » Jan 2nd, '09, 20:18

Thanks for feeding, not sure I understood exactly what you didn't like, but all is good, thanks again.
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Re: "Love Will II" NEW EMADYVILLE

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 2nd, '09, 20:32

Emadyville wrote:Thanks for feeding, not sure I understood exactly what you didn't like, but all is good, thanks again.


well i didn’t say that i don’t like it or somethin ,, well i liked it honestly ,, hve already said why ,, but what i meant is that i didn’t feel it emotionally or it didn’t touch my heart lyrically as your previous love will , nd that's doesn’t mean that's it's not good or i don’t like it .. nah still it's sick ,, but it's just a comparison between ( love will ) nd ( love will ll) ... hope u did get my point know :)
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Re: "Love Will II" NEW EMADYVILLE

Postby Emadyville » Jan 2nd, '09, 22:33

yeah i do now, i mean these were two different style songs, the first one i wrote and tried to be as in general as possible, the second one she pissed me off to the point i was like fuck it i'm saying what i want to. I thought it was just as strong lyrically, i think the slower feel and more anger may have taken away from it, but i really appreciate all your feed.
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Re: "Love Will II" NEW EMADYVILLE

Postby <Stiiccy> » Jan 11th, '09, 18:10

nice nice drop bro...

really loved the energy...really loved the lyrics...

nice beat...great flow

your comming along really good...

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Re: "Love Will II" NEW EMADYVILLE

Postby gutawafang » Jan 11th, '09, 18:22

i seriously like you rhyming about love. inspires me really a lot.

so :y:
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Re: "Love Will II" NEW EMADYVILLE

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Jan 11th, '09, 19:25

the beat choice is nice...flow is constant...nuttin wow-ish..but constant
lyrics are great... :y: dont know if i should point this out but the hook seems a bit quiet :sweating:
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Re: "Love Will II" NEW EMADYVILLE

Postby Emadyville » Jan 12th, '09, 03:25

Thanks for all the feed
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Postby B.A.D. » Jan 12th, '09, 04:16

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Re: "Love Will II" NEW EMADYVILLE

Postby Jay-19 » Jan 12th, '09, 15:15

Awesome track man!
The lyrics are deep and you can really tell that you mean what you're saying.
You kept the perfect energy throughout the track, really great job on the delivery part.
Flow is tight. Though it seems like you're switching it up a little bit from time to time.
Nothing wrong with that though, just gives the track an extra boost.
Beat is fucking insane! I love the sample on the hook, fits it perfectly.

Really good drop bro!
Keep 'em coming! :y:
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Re: "Love Will II" NEW EMADYVILLE

Postby Emadyville » Jan 12th, '09, 18:17

Thanks a lot for the feed!
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